How to learn English? (30/30 Challenge)

[Katrin]

Victoria isn?t happy that they are must waiting for the next stepp in an office. She wants to call the Camerlengo and takes the phone at the office. But on the other line isn?t the Camerlengo, it?s the switching center. The man on this line don?t understand what Victoria want.
The Swiss Guard, in its office Victiria and Langdon must wait, it?s very sour. He must bring Victoria and Langdon to the Camerlengo.
Victoria tells the Camerlengo about the the can of antimatter. The antimatter must be somewhere in the Vatikan city. It?s only a drip, but with a large effect. The drip of antimatter can can blow up the whole Vatikan city.
The Camerlengo wants that all men of the Swiss Guards look for the antimatter.
Than the Camerlengo gets a call from an anonymous caller.
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[Yankee]

Hi Katrin

Here are my suggestions:

[_vivien_]

Hello,

the story goes on:

On the flight to the NASA discovery Rachel remembers her mother. She died on Thanks Giving day a few years ago. Because of Rachels late flight and her father convincing a lot of work, they hadn’t been with her for the traditional lunch and she died in an accident on the street. When Rachel had arrived, the police had been already in their home and her father was giving an interview to the press. Up till now Rachel is accusing her father to be guilty on the death of her mother.

Rachel recognizes that they are flying across the polar cycle and wonders where they are flying to. The only thing she can see ist ice. Then the plane begins to land and Rachel is very frightened about that. Down on the ice, there is nothing else she could see. The pilot leaves her and flies back. So Rachel has to trust the driver of a Pathfinder to lead her to the administrator of NASA and follows him in his car. They drive two miles and arrive at an Ice Dome. They switch through a smal door at the side.

In the meantime Magery Tesch (?) has a conversation with president Herney at the White House. She's going to take part at the press conference this evening. Herney doesn't agree. He doesn't want to put to much importance to Sextons conference. If Magery takes part it would show that Herney is concerning the news of Sexton. Another point is that Magery is not made to be on TV because she is not very atractive. But she is the right one to work behind the scenes. Margery leaves no doubt on Herney she will take part.

In the ice dome Rachel meets Lorence Extrum (?) the administrator of NASA. Exrum explains that he trusts and respects the President. And only because of that he lets Rachel in. He doesn't trust her because her father Senator Sexton is fighting angainst his agency. Then he checks her knowledge about EOS. The discovery is an enormous rock a few hundred meters below the ice. It's a meteorite. Rachel is disapointed. That should be all? But Extrum explains that not the size is the discovery but the material wich is covered with snow for 300 years now.

Regards
Vivien

[Yankee]

Hi Vivien

Here are my suggestions for your latest report:

[Yankee]

Hi Heike

Here are my suggestions:

[lissy]

Hello

this is my new report about "Digital Fortress".

Susan Flechter was looking for the commander and she found him in his office. She saw that he got a gun. He told her that he got somethings straight. He confessed that he decrypted Tankados e-mail two months ago. At first he thougt a unbreakable code is impossible, but Tankado sounded more details and he must realized "anyone couldn?t stop Digital Fortress". For this reason he had a idea, when he couldn?t stop Tankado he musted change the code. His plan was simple. When he get the pastkey he could unlock a copy of Digital Fortress and than he inserted a modification. In this manner the NSA could use Digital Fortress for own purpose. He planned to facilitate the release of a unbreakable algorithm. Everone would switch to Digital Fortress, because they thought the NSA couldn?t break him. In truth the NSA is able to do this.

Regards Heike

[Yankee]

Hi Heike

Here are my suggestions:

[_vivien_]

Hello to everyone,

In the Ice Dome Rachel gets to know scientist Corky Marlint (?) and tv actor Mike Talent (?). Talent has the task to produce a documentry about the discovery for the public. Both want to explain the discovery to Rachel now.

At the same time Gabrielle Ash wonders about the presence of Marjorie Tench at the televised debate. She warns Sexton to be careful. But Sexton's self confidence pushes all doupts away.

Corky Marlint explains three types of meteorites and it's consists by a piece of rock to Rachel. She holds the rocks against the light and sees little pieces glistening in the stone like little bubbles. Rachel is astonished. Now Corky reaches her a piece of the discovery. Unlike the others it's white and looks like a disk. When Corky orders her to move it she sees a bug on the other side of the piece. It's a fossil with seven foot pairs.

At the televised debate Tench commends no news. She denies a meeting of President Herney and the administrator of NASA. Tench tries to change the subject of the debate but Sexton helds on. She decides to ask Sexton to decide if he goes further on or quit NASA after election. In the background Gabrielle's horrows come true. She hopes Sexton would find an answer of compromise. But Sexton says he would abolish NASA.

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Yours
Vivien

[Yankee]

Hi Vivien

Here are my suggestions. (I've also given you the spellings of the names for some of the new characters.)

[Katrin]

Hello,

here is my new report about "Angels & Demons":

The anonymous caller introduces himself to Camerlengo as messenger Illuminati. He tells the Illuminati will destroy the Vatikan City at midnight. Langdon and Victoria experienced that four cardinaeles disappeared. One cardinal to be murdered per hour. The listeners of the telephone call are frightened. The other cardinaeles begin to miss the four caridnaeles and become nervous.
The Camerlengo wants to evacuate the caridnaeles. But the Swiss gardist didn?t this. He wants to find the bomb before midnight.

The anonymous caller calls to the BBC. He had a big story about the Pope choice.

Langdon and victioria consider what they can do. Langdon had an idea. He wants in the vatikan archives. The Camerlengo hesitates but then he gives Langon the permission. Langdon wants to search a book of Galileo. He has made four sculptures for the church. But he was an Illuminati, too. So must have the sculptures the four signs of the science: earth, air, fire and water. This four signs were guides to the Illuminati. Only who found these away could become an Illuminati.

Best regards
Katrin

[Yankee]

Hi Katrin

Here are my suggestions. I had a bit of trouble with your last two sentences (see my questions at the end).

[Katrin]

Hi Amy,

sorry that you not understand my last two sentences.
I hope you understand me, now:

These symbols lead to the Illuminati, but you must find the symbols step by step around to Illuminati to come.
Yes, only people who could find the symbols on the four sculptures could become Illuminati.

Thank you an d bye, bye
Katrin

[lissy]

Dear Amy,

this is my new report about "Digital Fortress".

In my opinion it is correct, that the commander doesn?t have the passkey yet. Because of your other suggestion I mean "anybody could".

The story goes on:

Susan Flechter got the order to find the passkey in Hale?s computer and so she went in his office. While she was searching in his accout, she noticed that she isn?t allone. Hale overpowered Susan and took she hostage. He called the commander and demanded his gun or he killed Susan. Hale knew the commander?s plans about Digital Fortress and so he assumed the commander complied in (?). But the commander called the NSA-securityservice and told that Hales took his head cryptographer hostage and the Hale had killed the NSA junior sys-sec. Hales feared the security make a run of the office and killed him. He escaped with Susan on the staircase, but the commanders call was a trick he hadn?t called the security. While Hale went down stair he realized his mistake, but it was to late. The commander overpowered him on the bottom and saved Susan.

Regards Heike

[Yankee]

Hi Heike

[lissy]

Hello Amy,

thanks for the correction.

Your assumption about Hale?s demands are correct. He would kill Susan, if the commander didn?t hand over his gun. It is also possible, when I use "demand" in this sentence?

OK back to the story. Susan and the commander tie Hale up (?) and the commander instructed Susan continue to look for the passkey. Suddenly they heared a horn and a yellow siren light spun abvoe the floor. The commander left the room and went upstairs to his terminal. Hale woke up from the loud signal and he asked Susan, if she released him. Susan countiue to demanded the passkey form him, but he told her, that he has?nt it and that he isn?t North Dakota. He told her that he had spoon the account form the commander and there was a tape. The mails form North Dakato in his account were only copys form Strathmores account. He told that he had read Brainstroms form Strathmore and he knews his plans about Digital Fortress. He claimed that he had abort her tracer, because he thought she were looking for him.

Regards Heike