How to learn English? (30/30 Challenge)

[Yankee]

Hi Heike

One of the main reasons I asked you about the name of Susan Fletcher's boyfriend is that it is much easier (and less clumsy) to write about him if you know his name.
Here are some suggestions for you latest report:

[_Vivien_]

Hello,

Today, CNN reportet about the conflict in Middle East, too. Amarican and european citizens go to Cyprus by ship. Cyprus is an island in the eastern mediterranean sea. There, they do not stay long. They go to theyr countries by plane. Other people from lebanon flee to Syria to escape from terror.

I?m very sorry for the families and children. Many of them suffer the terror they didn?t want to be involved.

I?m looking for better news tomorrow.

Vivien

[Katrin]

Hello,

I have started to listen the hearbook „Angels & Demons“, yesterday.
In the middelpoint it?s a nuclearcenter in Switzerland.
A man becomes attacks and he is to say a password. He said the password and becomes killed.

Robert Langdon became called in “night”. It?s 5 o’clock in the morning. The caller is Mr. Kohler. Mr. Kohler want see Mr. Langdon, but he don?t say what he want from Mr. Langdon. Mr. Langdon it?s very tired and finished the call.
But he cann?t sleep any longer. So he stand up and goes in the kitchen. Here are coming a fax for him. What he must see on the fax shocked him. It?s a dead man and on his body is branding ILLUMINATI. In this moment is coming a call for him. It?s Mr. Kohler. Mr. Langdon ask Mr. Kohler from where he had its number. Mr. Kohler have the number from Mr. Langdon from the world wide web. He write in his new book about ILLUMINATI. Mr. Kohler said he want Mr. Langdon see and a privat jet it?s waiting at the airport for him. Mr. Langdon have no choice. So say Mr. Langdon it?s okay.

About million miles from Boston he meets two man in Rom. They look and the window and one man say: “Tonight begins a new world.”

Langdon drives to the airport. There are waiting a man for him. It?s the pilot. Langdon see the jet. The jet looks how a shuttle only windows. It?s for Langdon not easy, because he have agoraphobie. The pilot say that?s the fly it?s not long. In one hour they?re in Geneva. Langdon think it?s the Geneva in New York, but the pilot explain him, that?s they fly to the Geneva in Switzerland. Langdon it?s very surprise.

This are the first chapters. I?m strain what is coming in the next chapters. I will report.

Best regards
Katrin

[Lissy]

Hello

with refer to my last mail I want to get something straight:

Rocio is an usual spanish name f?r a Spanish woman and it means dewdrop (drop in dew) in Spanish and the old Candian-man translate the Spanish word in english.

David Becker called the escort service again and posed as a tourist, who had found the billfold form a german and he want to give him it back. The man from the escort feared, that Becker goes to the police-offices. So he tell him where the german business man is and that he dinnered with the escort Rocio. David Becker should go to the restaurant and the billfold hand over the waiter. David went to the restaurant, but the german and the escort are leaved it one hour ago. The waiter told david that he can leave a message. After David had written a notice he saw, that the waiter written the roomnumber of the cover. David searched the room and get entry. He speaks with Rocio and asked she at the ring. She told him that she has sold the ring a punk. David demanded more information and she told him, that the punk are english, but he had a shirt with a english-flag.

That was my report.

[Yankee]

Hi Vivien

You'll find my suggestions for improvement after the quote. I agree with you. It would really be great if the news were good instead of so bad.

Amy

[Yankee]

Hi Katrin

A very interesting report!
You are describing the book in the present tense. That's fine, but don't forget the "s" endings for verbs in the third person singular. He has, he wants, he doesn't know, etc.

Also, keep in mind that the scenes change back and forth in books. Sometimes one scene (chapter) happens in location X and the next chapter takes place in location Y.

I'm also anxious to find out what will happen next!

Amy

[Yankee]

Hi Heike

Thanks for the clarification of Rocio. So, Rocio is a usual name for a Spanish woman but it can also be translated as "dew drop". Got it.

Since you are writing your report in the past tense, you need to be careful about the grammar of reported speech (i.e., when you talk about what someone said). Also, the words "German" and "English" are always capitalized.

You'll find my suggestions after the quotations.
I'm looking forward to you next report!

Amy

[_Vivien_]

Hello,

I starten listening to an audio book, too.
It?s "Deception Point" by Dan Brown. The first chapters it was difficult not trying to understand every single word but to follow the story.

The story begins with a scene in Sibiria. There, a geologist and his four huskies was murdered. He and his dogs were kicked out of a flying helicopter!

Then, the location changes. Now it takes place in Washington D.C.. Rachel Sexton is a 34 year old, attractive woman. Her father is senator Sedgwick Sexton. He calls her for a meeting. They have their breakfast in a cafe. There, he offeres her to work on his campaign for the next election. Rachel doesn?t want to. She is a agent of NRO (National Reconnaissance Office). And she had worked hard to get this job. So she doesn?t want to quit it. In this discussion they are interupted by a reporter. While her father answers his question, she receives a message on her pager. She has to come immediately to her office. She leaves the cafe and hurries to the agency.

To be continued...

Regards
Vivien

[Lissy]

Hello,

thanks for correction. I want to trouble the correct grammar to take.

Ok, this is my report:

Susan Fletcher had received the order to find out more about "North Takota". She wrote him a mail and hoped that he answered. She found out (?) that "North Takota had send the mail form a anonymous mail-account and over this account the path form the e-mail is encoded. During she served in the internet a other NSA-employee went in the office. His name is Hell. Before he worked by the NSA he was a privat code-breaker and had found out a back door to a NSA-codbreakingsystem. The NSA hired him, because they freared he could be danger for the NSA. If the chief from Susan Fletcher, commander Stratmore, saw Hell, he was very angred and he asked Susan about the reason at his attendance. The attack form the blackmailer is secret and Hell might not imformed about this (?).During the both speaked, Hell loged in the computer from Susan. He loaded documents of a memory card and manipulated the secret programm. If Susan comed back and she entered her past key. On the monitor inticated "traser abort". (Can you tell me whats the meaning of this ???)

See you soon!

Heike

[Katrin]

Hi,
here ist my new report about the hearbook "Angels and Demons".

Langdon is started with the shuttle to Geneva. He is fly in a high about sixthousend feet. Arrived in the Switzerland it?s waiting a black Peugot for him. The car brings Landon to an impressiv area. The area is how a little town with a spital, Supermarket and a cinema. Langdon thinks what is it? Than he can read this: it?s the CERN - recherch Nuclear. The center of the area is a glas cathetrel. Here are waiting the director for Langdon. He?s a man in a wheelchair.
The wheelchair is very electric. He has a computer, mobilephone and a videocamera.
In the glascathetrel - it?s very clean and steril - reading Langdon an artikel about the world wide web. He?s very suprised. Langdon thought the world wide web is an invention of U.S. But isn?t so. The www is an invention of CERN.
Inside the house sees Langdon some interesting things, too.
The people at CERN are coming from fivehundreds universities and speak sixty nationaly languages.
Than they goes a the penthouse. Kohler told that he has found the corpse body in the morning. The name of the dead man is Leonardo Vetra. He would be become fivty two years old in the next week. Kohler has not called the poilice. The situation is are to complex.
In the room where the corpse body lies it?s very cold. Landon is shocked as he see the death man with the branding ILLUMINATI. Langdon tells Kohler the history of ILLUMINATI. The are beginning about fivehundreds years. A group of mens meeting to talk about physics. They have not the theory of the church. The church are fights against the group. But the group spread about Europe. A high Illuminati was Galileo. He looks with his telescope to the spinning planets, heards voice in different languages, tells the story of simitry and balance, heaven and hell, night and day, hot and cold, dark and bright.
The church told the people the Illuminati are satanic. Many years the people think the Illuminati are died. But they are spread to Amerika.
Kohler asks Langdon that he heplds to found the Illuminati. But LANGDON thinks it?s impossible because the Illuminati are died. He thinks it?s a other organisation they takes the symbol of Illuminati.
Kohler takes Langdon in the working room of Vetra. And he must see Langdon a cruzifix. Vetra was a physics and a catholic priest. He has wrote a book "God, miricale and the new physic". But was the Illuminati the murder? Kohler shows Langdon that something was stolen. It?s the eye of Vetra.
Vetra had a daughter. There are coming now. She?s a physics, too. She cann?t understand that Kohler have not informed the police.

It?s not simple.

Regards
Katrin

[Yankee]

Hi Vivien

I've read this book already. It's very interesting. Enjoy it!
Here are my suggestions for your report:

[Yankee]

Hi Heike

Thanks for your latest report. In addition to my other suggestions, I’ve also corrected the spelling of two names. I tried to answer your last question at the end.

[Yankee]

Hi Katrin

Yes, you did write a long report this time. .
Here are some suggestions:

[Lissy]

Thanks for the response.

Thats my report today:

Susan stared at her monitor and repeated the words "Tracer abort". She couldn?t grasped whats the meaning of this, but she had a idea and printed a record of the last computer settings (?). She disvovered, that a setting was manipulated. The only one how was in the same room was Greg Hale. She logged in on his computer and found a message form "North Dakota" it was send form Greg Hales computer. Greg Hale was North Dakota.

David Baker was looking for the Punk in Sevillia. He walked on the streets and suddenly he saw she. White, blue and red hair, a piercing and black clothes. There were a crowd of Punks and they get into a bus. David tried to reached the bus, but he can?t reached it. The runed after the croswise Sevillia. The Bus stooped in the near of a great hall, where the Punks are met (?). He speaked with one of them and asked him for a Punk woman, which had with, blue and red hair and a shirt with a British flagg. The punk laughed and tell Davit that the most of the Punks had this hair color at time and he helped him although when he gave him money. David promised him that and the Punk tell him a name and saw that the girl left Spain yesterday night at a plane.

OK. Thats was the report. Heike

[Yankee]

Hi Heike

Here are my suggestions: