#2 (permalink) Fri Jul 21, 2006 9:32 am TOEFL essay samples: Playing a game is fun only when you win |
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Hi shiny22,
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Playing a game is fun only when you win.
Games are a good source of enjoyment. It keeps one healthy and fit. Some people like to play A game with an attitude to win, for some it is a profession and for some it’s a fun.
Playing A game for fun is observed in some groupS of people who are very bored tired or stressed, they experiences happiness in it. This is usually observed in small kids who likes/LIKE playing with toys, dolls, they find joy in it and IT gives relief to their parents. They find in it a companion, when they are alone and don’t have friends or if both the parents are working. Many youngsters also play for fun, like in football during rains/WHEN IT'S RAINING.
For me A game is (a) fun only if I win .I like badminton which is my favorite game .I enjoy it a lot ,I am quiet addict to it /QUITE ADDICTED TO IT ,every evening I (would) like to play with my friends. My routine includes daily net practice from a coach who masters/TEACHES me some strokes
Winning desire/THE DESIRE TO WIN nurtures jealously to succeed on/OVER the opponent ,which makes you more focusSED towards that goal. People try to work hard ,professionals like Sania Mirza ,Mahesh Bhupati practice from A very young age ,it’s (a ) bread butter for them .They devote their whole life for/TO it. Cricketers for example representING their respective country play with an aim to win, which develops a killer instinct, If they win its/IT gives them immense joy, satisfaction.
People like to play A game just for enjoyment, but for me I always aim to win which brings a sense of satisfaction to me, I forget my worries, it’s a real stress reliever for me. |
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#3 (permalink) Wed Aug 13, 2008 8:15 am TOEFL essay samples: Playing a game is fun only when you win |
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Hi all, I want to share my essay in the same topic. Could you please comment or sharing any idea?
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Game is a kind of activity for entertainment and relaxing. Some people have less motivation to play game if they foresee that they will loose. In contrast, I believe that people will have lots of fun and some benefits even they are not win in the game.
People can practice the body movement by playing game. To play a game, people need to use at least one part of their bodis. For example, we ususlly use eyes and hands to play a computer game. This activity will lead us to practice eyeball and hands movement and the thinking process also. Like playing a computer game, a sport game make us practice the movement of many parts of bodies such as dancing and shooting games.
People will receive some benefits from playing game. Our bodies will be stronger and healthier after playing game because we usually move the bodies. For instance, my sister she love to dance with the playstation game. The winner of the game is a person who can dance correctly with all patterns of the game. She has never been the first winner but she told me that it like excercise and feel good to dance.
Moreover, playing game with others will make good relationship. From my experience, I played chest with my friend but I lost. I was not happy to loose but I can exchange ideas with my friend while we were palying a game. She also teach me the tips of the game as well.
To summarize, I think that palying game make people have fun and also help to practice the bodies' movement even we are not win in the end. The benefits of playing game are the good health and good reltionship. |
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