TOEFL® essay: Why do people attend college or university?

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Why do people attend college or university?

Every year many students in all world attend college or university. There are different reasons about this.All of this people try to develop themselves in the college. But I do not think that the time spent in the college is lost time.

One of the reasons that people go to the college is because they want to prepare themselves for a good career.The students learn theoretically and practically how to solve problems in the real work situations. They take knowleges in specific areas and this helps them to be a professionals.

Some people go to the college because they like to learn. Usually this students continuos their education and win awards in sciens.They have a good chance to express a good learning possibilities.

Other people go to college because they can meet people who like to learn. They can meet a new friends from all world. This is the way to make an interesting social experiece. In the college atmosphere everyone can try to be a leader, to develop communication skills with students and lecturers.

Nowadays a higher education is nessesity.The college in an investment in personal future. This is and my reason to be a student.

[Hema]

As we all know that today education is very important in our lives. we always seek luxurious life which need decent amount of money and well educated person can get it easily than noneducated. however, there are many other reasons for which people attend college or university.

first, as i mentioned above, to live decent life and to make good money people go to college. If person is well qualified he/she can get blue collar job. sometimes they don't even need to look for a job but opportunity comes to them.

second reason could be the status in society. some people want to achieve higher and respective status in their society by getting higher education. for example, in our society if the person is phamacist or MD, he/she recieves special respect in any cultural or social activities.

third, some people want to enjoy college because this time of our life is very cheerful and enjoyable. In college students are free from social and family matters and they don't have any kind of responsibilities but their studies. they have friends who are very intimate members in our lives. actually, i have enjoyed a lot in my college days.

in conclusion, i would say that college is very important place for all of us to improve our quality of life as it teach us good manners and increase our knowledge. college has became essential for every students in order to make their own identity in this competitive world.

please give me some suggestions on my grammer, vocabulary and sentance structure.

thank you.

[Olkozian]

Hi, i wrote another essay
Please help me to improve it

Nowadays, education became a vital part of our life. It is hard to build your future, or imagine yourself without education. Many people in the world have either finished schools, colleges, universities or studied at home. People attend colleges for many reasons. In my opinion people attend colleges and universities in order to get knowledge, rise ethically, and have good career after education.
The first reason to attend colleges is getting knowledge. Presently, we could hardly do something without education. Even nurses, servants and butlers nowadays should have basic knowledge, be able to read somehow and write. Many colleges give theory without which it is hard to apply any implications in practice. Although a person can learn the same material at home, it is easier and better to get knowledge in groups at school or college. Thus, attending colleges accelerates perception of information.
Secondly, attending college allows people to rise ethically, socially. When students go to colleges they communicate with peers, instructors or friends. For example, on breaks they discuss films, books, exchange their opinions etc. The more they are talking, the better their language develops. Schools teach morality, for instance greeting each other, providing feedback, coming on time and behaving properly. Thus colleges develop students ethically.
Thirdly, colleges allow its student to get good work after education. The more prestigious institution is the more chances to get good work, well-paid. Employers prefer to hire well-qualified and higher educated people to those with school background. In many colleges students of the last year of education are chosen by future employers before they graduate.
Thus, education opens great windows to the world by developing a person ethically, promoting his career and giving him vital knowledge useful in future.

[Kitosdad]

Hema, a few tips.

OK, BASIC ENGLISH.
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Every sentence starts with a CAPITAL LETTER, no matter how short the sentence may be.

Every sentence finishes with a full stop, question mark, or exclamation mark.

You refer to yourself as " I ", not " ( i ) ".

A CAPITAL letter is used for the name of every person, country,language ( Indian, French, German. ) or day of the week, month, a holiday date ( Easter, Xmas ),a brand ( Oxo, Sprite, Coke. ) or a monument, as in Tower Bridge, Big Ben.

If you take the time to digest these tips, then your writing will improve dramatically.
If you don't, then you are wasting your time, and everyone else's.

Kitos.
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[Love43]

Why do people attend college?
please help me to revise@@Thanks

Nowadays, more and more people choose to attend college or university for the purpose of obtaining better job opportunities, acquiring specialized knowledge, and enjoying fresh and exciting experience on campus.

First and foremost, people have the option to go to college in order to get more opportunities to win the desirable position in the future. There is no doubt that employers tend to hire well qualified college graduates who are received bachelor degree in certain professional field, especially who have educational background in world-famous universities such as Harvard and Cambridge. Because learning experience in such schools equip their graduates with good command of various foundational knowledge and comprehensive capability as well. Therefore, a candidate, who graduated from prestigious school, might be more competitive than others, and then will be more likely to get promising job in this fierce work force market.

Secondly, a college degree offers access to jobs with a clear path towards professional advancement. For instance, A B.S in biology could allow a student to find a job after graduation, a first step on the road towards a career in scientific research. The same major could also be used to apply for medical school, and pursue a career as a doctor. Both of avenues would be unavailable without taking the first step of an undergraduate degree in biology.

Last but not least, learning at college is always an excitement for the youngsters. They will be attracted by the interesting and diverse courses taught by experts, be absorbed in studying their own favourite field, be delighted in the camaraderie with their schoolmates, and be enchanted by their sweet and pure love story. The campus is the place where knowledge is delivered and talents are discovered, where intriguing stories happen. No wonder that I am often told by many people that college experience is the most wonderful and worthwhile phase in their life.

[Love43]

Hello,Olkozian!
I like your essay. However, as far as I can see, if you can use more appropriate words and perfect your sentence,your essay will be greater.

For example, I've never seen the expression like that"Schools teach morality, for instance greeting each other, providing feedback, coming on time and behaving properly." Maybe that is better like"Schools teach morality such as politeness, punctuality and integrity."

"The more prestigious institution is the more chances to get good work, well-paid." I consider that could be revised like " The more prestigious institution is, the better and more opportunities its graduates have to get well-paid jobs."

That's my personal opinion. If you can help me to improve,I would feel grateful!

[Love_English0405]

Hi, I write another essay too. Please help me to correct it.

Nowadays, almost all people want to attend a college or university for many reasons.
For one thing, in a college or university, you'll have more chance to learn and enrich your knowledge. You can learn from the lectures, you can also learn from your friends. Each one have a different idea, so you can use it to support your own opinion. Your learning will help you in your career in the future, you'll know how to work, how to organize your company, how to manage your staff,... The company which you apply for will look at your profile, and if they see that you've graduated from a college or university, they'll choose you instead of the one who have no degree. Knowledge is the best way to success.
In some countries, attending a famous college or university is pride of the family, so everyone try their best to pass the entrance examination to that college or university. It's one of the way for the student to express their excellence with their parents and friends and they'll find that they've done something meaningful.
After you've had a degree, you'll feel that you're now mature and you have to do your future work with all responsibilities. Furthermore, a society with all of the people who are well educated is better than a society with people who are not well educated. People can contribute to the world with all of their ability to make it better.
Therefore, now more and more people go to college and university for further knowledge.

I don't have many ideas for this topic, so I can't write this essay longer.