#2 (permalink) Thu Sep 28, 2006 9:17 am TOEFL essay: Whether or not own a car in the big city |
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Hi,
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In my view, there is no need to purchase a car in the/A big city, if the city has a good transportation system and better connectivity/CONNECTIONS from one place to another. If we do not buy a car we will help our country, our city and ourselves. The most important way WE CAN DO THIS is by decreasing air and noise pollution. If we do not have a car, we will decrease/REDUCE the rate of car accidents and traffic jam also. In some countries roads are very narrow and if everybody drives a car, it will block the roads. In A big city, we have local trains and bus connectivity/CONNECTIONS we should use them and avoid purchasing a car. Use of public transportation will (get) ENABLE US TO free ourselves from a lot of tensions. To drive a car we would need to keep/HOLD a license. Some emergency cash will also be needed while driving. But many times A car is useful also in big cities. Suppose, somebody getS injured or sometimes you want to go for A picnic THEN at that time A car is very useful.
A Car is not a need/NECESSITY (of) IN A big city if you would like/WANT to find a pollution free country or city. |
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