#2 (permalink) Fri Oct 06, 2006 8:47 am TOEFL essay sample: Some qualities of a good parent |
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Hi,
I've made some suggestions in CAPITAL letters:
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If we think about the future of the child, the role of their/THE parent comeS (first in the rows) TOP OF THE LIST because parents are considered as the first teacher of the child. It is through their parent that the children learnS not only talking and walking but also about (the) moral values, and ethicS. Therefore, THE following are some of the most important qualities I feel is/ARE required for A good parent.
Firstly, (the) love; Love is one of the most important features in THE proper development of (the) children. For example, if we compare the children who grows/GROW with A loving parent and that of children who grows/GROW UP by themselves without the parent/WITHOUT PARENTAL LOVE love. The nature of the child without parents is more aggressive, less compassionATE and lacks A caring nature for (the) society. So, to have A good society, the love of Aparent becomes necessary.
Secondly, (the) discipline; discipline is another important characters/CHARACTERISTIC of human beings. Without discipline one cannot become a productive human being. It is therefore the responsible/RESPONSIBILITY of the parent to correct their children when they are on THE wrong track. The children should be continuously teach/TAUGHT and make them/MADE to understand what are/IS good and what are/IS bad. They should be make/MADE responsible for their misdeedS and try to correct them.
Thirdly, habit; when children are born they are like empty vesselS. It is up to their parent what to put in and WHAT not. If we teach them about good habitS they will adapt to it,/THEY WILL ADOPT THEM which will help them when they grow older. (Like) parentS should make A habit of reading books to their children, (the caring for other0 CARING FOR OTHERS.
Likewise there is/ARE other many /MANY OTHER qualities that are essentials/ESSENTIAL for /A GOOD PARENT the goods parent. |
You have made many mistakes on agreement. Remember a singular subject needs a singular verb and a plural subject needs a plural verb.
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