#2 (permalink) Sat Oct 07, 2006 10:25 am TOEFL essay: In your country, is there more need for land... |
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THE Environment and wild life extinction is/ARE the ongoing problemS of the 21st century. Increasing deforestation and increasing building has causes/HAVE CAUSED (the) major environmentAL changes. (The) global warming is the/AN alarming threat to all of us. However, most (of the) people although with or without knowing this/THESE problems, continue to cut forest areas and build high building.
In my country, for the past few years in the name of modernisation, the government has started building many high tech houses and industry. Many forest areas were razed to THE ground. As a result, the earlier clean air of (the) places is now polluted with smoke produced by theSE industries and (the) vehicles. At the same time, there is also AN increasing number of people suffering from lung(s) and eye(s) infectionS. The dumping of tocsin wastes of industries in various places are now spoiling the fertility of the land and also the ground water. In addition, unheard in our history, today we have AN increasing rate of different epidemic diseases.
The increasing number of building and industry has also affected the thought and culture of the country. The cutthroat competition in THE job market and THE desire to earn money has devalued the thinking of people/PEOPLE'S THINKING. People today become more selfish and narrowed/NARROWMINDED (their thinking power).
Therefore, I think we do not need to develop more housing and industries. Rather it is now time for us to preserve the left/REMAINING land for greenery not only for us but also for the future generations. |
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