#2 (permalink) Sun Oct 08, 2006 9:52 am TOEFL essay sample: Some students prefer to study alone... |
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Some people prefer to study alone, while otherS with friends. It is up to (the once nature) THEIRPEROSNAL NATURE, which way they choose and WHICH works better for them. As for me, I would prefer to study alone and I have THE following reasons:
Firstly, since, I am A reserveD kind of person. I cannot easily mix with (the) other people. So, when we study with A group, there will be A lot of conversations and exchangeS of ideas. Because of my nature, I cannot freely express my views with the group. As a result, I feel (like) inferior to others and easily ( lost my) LOSE interest. So, instead of focusing my effort on study my mind lingers in/ON others/OTHER thoughtS.
Secondly, I feel that whenever or whatever we do, one of the most important things is concentration. If we could/CANNOT concentrate on whatever we do, the result will ALWAYS (be) always negative. Concentration is directly related to the environment we are in. If we are alone, there are/IS less noise and THERE ARE lesser/FEWER elements of distraction. We could focus our mind on whatever is in front of us. This is why many great yogis (who)go to quite/QUIET places to do /THEIR MEDITATIONS mediations. (The)Buddha spent 16 years alone under A banyan tree and WAS finally enlightened.
Finally, when we are alone we have more freedom; you are free from other people imposing their ideas on us/YOU. We are free to think of what we have in (on) mind. We are free to study (on) what we have in our mind. Therefore, on the basis of these reasons, I prefer to study alone thAn with A group. However, there are lot of other people who learn more when they are with A group. |
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