#2 (permalink) Wed Oct 11, 2006 8:16 am TOEFL essay sample: Watching television is bad for children |
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Hi,
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Some people might say that it is/HAS A negative effect on children to /IF THEY watch TV. By contrast, I totally disagree with the statement that watching TV is bad for children. There are several reasons for this. There is a way OF GETTING A ( to learn) great education by watching TV. ANOther way is to make more conversation with family.
First of all, children can learn a lot of thingS by watching TV rather then learning negative things. There are much/MANY great programs in TV show, (such as) ON science and international TOPICS. When I was A kid, I (had) always watched science TV showS, especially ON space. It was easiest to learn what I want by watching TV. Moreover, my friend’s kid always watchES international programS, which show different countries’ kidS HOW to speak one word in their own languages. As a result he can say “good morning” with/IN seven different languages. Watching TV enableS US to learn a lot of thinGs. In/ON THE other hand, there are many TV shows which are/HAVE A negative effect on children to watch/WATCHING TV. However, parents are able to manipulate of/A TV show by modern technology. Consequently, kids are unable to watch the TV shows that are bed/HAVE A BAD effect on them
Secondly, A TV program provides us /WITH MANY much topicS to talk ABOUT with OUR family. For example, when I was A kid, before we ate dinner, I always watched TV. Then, we could talk about what I had watched before dinner. Everyone in my house talked ABOUT one topic. Sometimes we talked about animalS. ON Other dayS we talked not only ABOUT nature, and/BUT also my parents' wedding through watching TV. As a result, watching TV gave us many topics in our family.
For these reasons, I totally disagree that watching TV is/HAS A bad effect on children because IT IS EDUCATIONAL (of more educational and giving new topics) AND PROVIDES US WITH NEW TOPICS |
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