#2 (permalink) Fri Oct 13, 2006 9:00 am TOEFL essay samples: borrowing money from a friend can harm |
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'A friend in need is a friend indeed'. Therefore, A friend is someone who is around us in (a )good and bad timeS.
However, true friendship DOES not just happen, it developed/DEVELOPS with time and understanding of each other. It depends on how you treat your friends. In most of the case,/IN MOST CASES it is like law of/THE SAYING THAT what you sow is what you reap. The foundation of true friendship should be based on faith, care and love. There is no place for distrust, hesitation, and jealousy. There are other relationships like THAT BETWEEN husband and wife, parent and child, teacher and student and many more. But the meaning of true friendship is different and it is above all these relationships. There are many stories, where friends sacrifice his life/THEIR LIVES in the name of friendship. In the life of A true friend, nothing is as important as (the) friendship.
Friends are one/THOSE, who not only shares/SHARE their happiness but also their pain. When in troubles/IN TIMES OF TROUBLE, friends are the oneS who come first to help. As for me, I highly value this relationship. Money and other things become less important to me than friendship.
Therefore, in my opinion, borrowing money cannot damage friendship. Instead, I believe it would bring happiness if its/IT helps and solveS the problem of the/A friend. |
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