#2 (permalink) Sat Oct 14, 2006 10:02 am TOEFL essay samples: Music |
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Hi Delta,
Welcome to the site. I've written some suggestions and have put them in CAPITAL letters:
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There's no doubt that everyone of us has his own favorite type of music. There are lots of music types such as: Pop , Rock and roll , Jazz , ClassicAL , Rap and Hip hop. Some people prefer to listen to Pop music while others love the Jazz kind of music and thats depends/THAT DEPENDS on people's opinion. However(ONE WORD), music types can identify/INDICATE/REVEAL the person's personality For example, when a person is listening/LISTENS to classicAL music you (can) know that he's a romantic person with a very quiet personality . On the other hand, when a person is listening/LISTENS to Jazz or Hip hop music you (can) know that he is a bold person with a strong personality. For me, I love to listen to pop music and sometimes to classical music for lots of reasons: First, I think it's so romantic and it explains lots of things about love, care/CARING and passion. Then, classic/AL music is so quiet and won't get/GIVE you a headache like other kinds of music. Moreover, I believe that the main reason for music is to feel the lyrics and the melodies at the same time and even to feel the singer's point OF VIEW , but in noisy music it's hard to feel all of these things because you can't hear the singer's voice when the music is so high and bad. In other wordS, we shouldn't forget that people's opinions are diffErent and if I hate something, ANother person may love it and like to listen to it. In conclusion, and for all those reasons I prefer to listen to the quiet kind of music that can make you feel the lyrics and the melodies at the same time. |
This is quite good. If you like you can have a look at a piece I've done for the site on the use of the Present Tense:
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