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#2 (permalink) Sun Oct 15, 2006 20:01 pm Healthy LifeStyle |
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Hi Delta,
My suggestions are in CAPITAL LETTERS:
There's no doubt that (the) health is so important to/IN people's life. Living a healthy lifestyle is important to feel happy and satisfied about yourself . Some people believe that a person should take care of him self and his food in order to live a happy and healthy life , while others don't pay that much attention to this thing/IDEA. As a matter of fact they don't think that it's important to take care (of) what theY eat . For me, I agree with the first group of people for sure because I think that when you eat right and drink right and then make/DO some exercises THIS is much better than just eating junk food and then stay sitting on the sofa watching T.V . People should move ABOUT to burn calories and to prevent this poison (of) fat DEVELOPING inside (of) them. My advice to all (the) people is to eat (the) healthy food and to drink lots of water all the time and if they feel hungry just eat an apple or any othe kind of fruit , and always make/DO exercises to help them feel better and even to look better because A healthy lifestyle leads to an amazing life without diseases. In conclusion, every one of us should do his/her best to live a healthy and happy life by eating the right food.
Good
Alan _________________ English as a Second Language You can read my ESL story Present Simple |
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#3 (permalink) Sun Oct 15, 2006 20:15 pm Healthy LifeStyle |
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thanks alot
but do you think am getting any better???? |
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*Delta* You can meet me at english-test.net
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#4 (permalink) Sun Oct 15, 2006 20:34 pm Healthy LifeStyle |
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Hi Delta,
This is certainly better than the other one. Keep up the good work.
Alan _________________ English as a Foreign Language You can read my EFL story Progressive Forms |
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Alan Co-founder

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#5 (permalink) Sun Oct 15, 2006 20:42 pm Healthy LifeStyle |
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| thanks for making me feel better |
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*Delta* You can meet me at english-test.net
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