TOEFL® essay sample: Parents are the best teachers in the life

[Alexcandy]

I'm trying my best to take the TOEFL test. Ofcourse, it should be begun with the best preparation about how to wrtite a good essay.Many thanks to whom correct my essay.

In my opinion, parents are the best teachers in the life for some major reasons. The first reason is that parents have more time than any others to teach you. Even when you are still a baby, parents let you hear the music to improve your brain and also your imagination. Gentle melodies make you have an opened mind and warm heart. Parents are people who always beside you through paint or happiness and give you many lessons from your mistakes. Do you realize that you don't have no more than ten years at school but nearly 30 years to learn with your parents? As a result, the more time you learn, the better you are. However, I am sure that you will wonder how much knowledge you can learn from your parents. Some answers are "A little". Some are "Nothing". If you can say "Yes" with three below questions, you have to admit that your background knowledge is the deeply root of parents' lessons:"Do your parents answer all (or nearly all) your questions about nature, society, animals...when you are a child?".Do your parents give you moral lessons after your faults or your bad behavior?". "Do they give you all the experiences in their life?" Nowadays, in a competitive society, you have to waste money, time and even the happiness or the promotion opportunities to have worthwhile lessons. But with your parents, these lessons are free. Where do you find the same? Nowhere! Therefore, knowledge is also the second reason why I suppose that parents are the best teachers. The last reason is the enthusiasm. Parents are always to teach you with all their hearts, from the least things you have to face with everyday to the turning points in your life. Children are the future and all hopes of parents. So parents always choose the best things and the most useful lessons to teach their children. They also give you the feeling of being cared and it's only a way to express their love for you. In conclusion, you have many teachers during the life and you can learn from many people, many things around you but the best teachers are always your parents.

[Alan]

Hi,

In my opinion, parents are the best teachers in life for some major reasons. The first reason is that parents have more time than any others to teach you. Even when you are still a baby, parents let you hear music to improve your brain and also your imagination. Gentle melodies make you have an OPEN mind and warm heart. Parents are people who ARE always beside you through PAIN or happiness and give you many lessons from your mistakes. Do you realize that you don't have more than ten years at school but nearly 30 years to learn with your parents? As a result, the more time you learn, the better you are. However, I am sure that you will wonder how much knowledge you can learn from your parents. Some answers are "A little". Some are "Nothing". If you can say "Yes" with three questions BELOW, you have to admit that your background knowledge is deeply rootED IN YOUR parents' lessons:"Do your parents answer all (or nearly all) your questions about nature, society, animals...when you are a child?".Do your parents give you moral lessons after your faults or your bad behavior?". "Do they give you all the experiences in their life?" Nowadays, in a competitive society, you have to waste money, time and even happiness or opportunities FOR PROMOTION to have worthwhile lessons. But with your parents, these lessons are free. Where do you find the same? Nowhere! Therefore, knowledge is also the second reason why I suppose that parents are the best teachers. The last reason is enthusiasm. Parents are always READY to teach you with all their hearts, from the SMALLEST things you have to face with everyday to the turning points in your life. Children are the future and all THE hopes of parents. So parents always choose the best things and the most useful lessons to teach their children. They also give you the feeling of being cared FOR and it's only a way to express their love for you. In conclusion, you have many teachers during YOUR life and you can learn from many people, many things around you but the best teachers are always your parents.

Alan
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