TOEFL® essay: People attend college or university for many different reasons

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People attend college or university for many different reasons( for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

I think that key for this question is in the core of education. Education is a service and universities offer this for the students. Every student is searching for good service at good price. We must look at the criterions which make one university more attractive for students. They are many but I will stop my attention at this which are important.

I think that every student collect information about university and after that make account. People attend in college or university because they think that university will give them best education for lowest price. This account is the fundament of this essay.

I’ll start my presentation with first part of account, which is a service called education. Second one is the price. One university has three factors which build it in whole. First one is material base. For good education University must provide a good libraly, internet access, room for resurection, well organized campus and scholarship for student. I think that material base is very important for one university, for example in my university in Bulgaria has many good teachers but there are not paid and student miss very advantages in education.

Other factor which is the body of one university is teachers. They must be with high qualiffication . It’s very important that teachers must be good paid because if they receive insufficion funds they will work at many universities and this make education at low level.

The third factor is accepting of students. If one university accept student with high score, environment in University will be better. This is like in the sport. If student have a good competition, they will increase their results.

Other part of the account which make students before they have been accepted university is price. If education price is high, they will search and attend for other university. Often really good universities offer a low price and sholarship.

People attend in university or college because they want to take a good service, which later to sell. Education is investment. Right investment will give us success.

[Alan]

Hi,

People attend college or university for many different reasons( for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

I think that key TO this question is in the core of education. Education is a service and universities offer this for the students. Every student is searching for good service at good price. We must look at the criteriA which make one university more attractive for students. They are many but I will RESTRICT my VIEW TO THOSE which are important.

I think that every student collectS information about A university and after that TAKES NOTE. People attend college or university because they think that university will give them THE best education AT THE lowest price. This account is the BASIS of this essay.

I’ll start my presentation with THE first part of THE account, which is a service called education. THE Second one is the price. One university has three factors which build it in A whole.THE First one is THE material base. For A good education A University must provide a good libraRy, internet access, room for resurRection????, well organized campus and scholarship for studentS. I think that THE material base is very important for A university, for example my university in Bulgaria has many good teachers but theY are not paid and THE studentS miss very MANY advantages in education.

ANOther factor which is the body of A university is teachers. They must HAVE high qualifficationS . It’s very important that teachers must be WELL paid because if they receive insufficion funds they will work at many universities and this PUTS education at A low level.

The third factor is THE ADMISSION of students. If A university acceptS studentS with A high score,THE environment in THE University will be better. This is THE SAME IN sport. If studentS have a good competition, they will IMPROVE their results.

ANOther part of the account which makeS students before they have been accepted AT university is price. If THE COST OF education is high, they will search and attend ANother university. Often really good universities offer a low price and sCholarship.

People attend university or college because they want to HAVE a good service, which later THEY CAN sell. Education is AN investment. THE Right investment will give us success.

Alan
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