#2 (permalink) Thu Dec 28, 2006 20:19 pm TOEFL essay sample: When people succeed it is only because of hardwork |
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Life is full of twistS and turns .Everyone has to struggle here in this world to overcome every obstacle in the way to success.For this hard work is necessary. Without working hard and just by sitting idle it will be hard for one to get success. Since from childhood and till now I always remember the sentence that my parents used to tell me "TO be A better person in life and to get success YOU havE to work hard, The result of hard work is always fruitful,so YOU have to work hard". I want to give exampleS from my experience today whatever I am its only becAUSE of hard work. For a guy from A lower class family it is almost impossible to GRADUATE in enginneering BY FINANCING YOURSELF. It's only becAUSE of the regular hard work I got A scholarship to do BTECh.I don't believe in luck since luck is never my LOT.
Today's world is a competItive world. Everyone here wants to be famous and wantS success in his life. Whether he may be A successful boxer, sportman, actor or writer his present positiOn is only due to hard work.Let's take an example FROM people who win gold medalS in THE OLYMPIC Games ,novel??? prize in differENT fields of knowledge is only because of hard work. Luck has nothing to do with it .Just by watching television and siTTing idle if YOU are saying that can bend down success in your knee means YOU are wrong. YeS perhaps YOU HAVE got success sometimes becAUSE of your luck but it is not true always .Saying that I am A lucky person success automatically comes ....these are the only wordS of saying ,reality is different .
There is a well kNown proverb "NO pain, NO gain" hard work never goES wasteD .Although it may be later or sooner success comes to YOUR feet. we can have a look towards the life of great PEOPLE in the world like Mahatma GHandhi ,NapoleOn ,Florence ??,Shakespeare ,gautam buddha,Albert Einstein,Newton they all had struggled hard throughOUT their life .They had made the right USE of every second and finally evryone got success in their life .The world today knows them .They all did not succeed at once in ther life. They had worked hard for many years and ultimately they got succeSS in their life and it proves that success that comes from hardwork is frUItful in comparision to the success that comes from luck .Luck is just accidental it may or may not be On your side .But success is sure if YOU choose the path of hard work.
Hard work has other advantages too ...... hard work makes A person determined .It will always make you cautious and energetic .So definitely the result YOU get from hard work will MAKE YOU realise that whatever path you had chosen earlier was the right one. THE Present market is the competitive market,whoever has got THE best potential,knowledge will get the best job. But it may happen that sometimes A person having lesser qualities than you can be selected from the same post instead of YOU. Inspite of this I can believe that where there is hard work, there is success.Luck does have a role in the course of success but the leading role in the path of success is played by hard work that is hardwork is THE key to success in life.
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