#2 (permalink) Sun Dec 31, 2006 12:38 pm TOEFL essay samples: Patriotic reverence for the history of a nation often... |
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Hi,
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Patriotism is A basic and fundamental PART of any country. Patriotic reverence is THE REASON WHY people today are ready to devote their whole life to serve theIR nation. It is the BASIS ON which the existence of the country lies. Once it vanishes, A country LOSES its identity. It is the history which acts as a predictor for the future.
Every country has its own history, heritage and culture . These are the basics which define any country. Human behaviour is always affected by the surroundingS where YOU ARE brought up. For example, if a child is brought up in the patriotic environment, his mind will automatically catch with up the patriotic ideas, which is necessary for the progess of one's country. This will make every child self determined and you can get rid OF the ambiguities that come in your way as you grow up.
The air of democracy that we are breathing today is only possible due TO the sacrifice of our great leaders. Every country is well known by its leaders,freedom fighters who sacrifice thEIR life for the welfare of THE nation. That's why their names are carved in the pages of the history IN golden words. Every coUntry pays great respect to its legends. When we come to know about their contributions towards the country, it encourages every citizen of the country to do something for the ENHANCEMENT of the country. For example, there were great leaders such as Mahatma Gandhi, AbRAHam LIncon who fought THEIR whole life for the betterment of society and couNtry. It is THE pride of the nation to have aN adventurous history. President Abdul Kalaam is the vivid picture whose work is vital for THE whole nation. One secrect behind his success is the patriotic reverence of the history for the nation.
In addition to this, respect for the history of the nation helps us to analyse the fact where the mistakes were MADE by our ancestors and what are the consequences that nation has to face if its leaders fight only for power and lust rather than for the welfare of the nation. For example, the tyrants like Adolf HITLer,Saddam Husein who used to suppresS people's feelings and opinions never achieved their goal. They were unable to sustain for the long term praCtice and THE ultimate result is theIR downfall. Thus, in every sense respect of history teaches us many things that we can implement in our real life. Hence there is no dought that patriotic reverence for history encourages us rather than discourageS.
Furthermore, the culture and arts of whICH we are part now can be only studIed through history. THE Modern age is the output of the gradual development of the past civilization. The drastic changes in the human race is reflected from history. Because of them life today is simpler and comfortable. Knowledge of all these things arouseS a feeling of deep respect within our hearts for them. Moreover it makes us feel responSIbLe for the development of the nation.
Time changes but the morals remain the same. So, patriotic reverenece seldom impedes growth. History itself is full of anecdotes, which forces us to think and extract only those things that are essential for the development of the nation.
In sum, Patriotic reverence for history of the nation is not an impediment for growth, rather it encourages progress.
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