TOEFL essay: Rich countries are stealing qualified people from poor countries

[danang]

TOEFL Essay:
By encouraging qualified people to leave their own country, rich countries are stealing from the Third World. Do you agree ?

Nowadays, more and more qualified people are moving to rich countries where they believe that there are more opportunities to develop their career path. Like some other people, I think that rich countries are stealing human resources from poor countries by encouraging this trend.

Firstly, human is a very costly resource to develop. Training a doctor or an engineer may cost a lot of money and requires poor countries to have a qualified system of education. Therefore, I see no reason to let the rich countries to steal qualified people without paying any training expense.

Beside, human resource is also a very important factor to the development of a country. Especially in the modern society, knowledge and technologies are much more important to the wealth of a country than any nature resource such as coal, gold, or land. By attracting qualified people, rich countries are also stealing future development opportunities from other countries.

Lastly, I believe that there are many measures for rich countries to gain benefit from qualified people of other countries but still keep them stay and help develop their own countries. In the recent years, companies from Japan, US, or Europe increasingly invest and open factories in developing countries such as China, India, Vietnam, etc. When they invest to another country, they also transfer new technologies and help to train people there. This is a very good measure and should be encouraged to protect the human resource of poor countries.

In general, I would like to stress that human is a very valuable resource of every countries. We have to stop the stealing of qualified people by rich countries so that this resource can be used to develop our own countries

[Alan]

Hi,

My suggestions are in CAPITAL LETTERS:

Nowadays, more and more qualified people are moving to rich countries where they believe that there are more opportunities to develop their career path. Like some other people, I think that rich countries are stealing human resources from poor countries by encouraging this trend.

Firstly,A human BEING is a very costly resource to develop. Training a doctor or an engineer may cost a lot of money and requires poor countries to have a qualified system of education. Therefore, I see no reason to let the rich countries steal qualified people without paying FOR any training expense.

BesideS, THE human resource is also a very important factor IN the development of a country. Especially in modern society, knowledge and technologies are much more important to the wealth of a country than any nature resource such as coal, gold, or land. By attracting qualified people, rich countries are also stealing future development opportunities from other countries.

Lastly, I believe that there are many measures for rich countries to benefit from qualified people of other countries but still keep them and help develop their own countries. In recent years, companies from Japan, US, or Europe increasingly invest and open factories in developing countries such as China, India, Vietnam, etc. When they invest IN another country, they also transfer new technologies and help to train people there. This is a very good measure and should be encouraged to protect the human resourceS of poor countries.

In general, I would like to stress that A human BEING is a very valuable resource of every countrY. We have to stop the stealing of qualified people by rich countries so that this resource can be used to develop our own countries

Alan
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[danang]

Thank you very much, Alan.

Could you please explain why you correct HUMAN to A HUMAN BEING