TOEFL essay samples: An automobile manufacturer is considering your community...

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An automobile manufacturer is considering your community and the neighbouring community as possible sites for a new factory. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of building the factory in each community. Use specific details and examples in your essay.

Nowadays, manufacturing of automobiles is prominent. That is because people want to save their time by the use of automobiles. Transportation is very easy by the use of automobiles. Everywhere world wide the usage of automobiles is increasing day by day. For automobiles manufacturing workers, labours and officers all are very important. They all play an important role. Therefore the manufacturer should give a chance and take employees opinions to choose the place for new automobile factory. In my view it does not matter whether an automobile factory is in my community or neighbouring community. That is because both have some advantages and disadvantages. These are as follows:

If a new automobile factory is going to open in my place then for a long time there could be pollution problems (noise, water and air). But on the other hand, these problems will not be as much if factory will open in my neighbouring community. Automobile factories usually create smoke, liquid waste and noise as well. These problems directly affect human life. Everybody wants to live in a clean atmosphere and likes to drink clean water. Therefore it will be good if an automobile factory does not open in my place.

If an automobile factory opens in my town then people who live in my town and work in the factory can save their time and money. They will not feel fatigue in their day to day life. But if a factory opens in my neighbouring community then people working in the factory will get tired. They will spend lots of time and money in their commute. These are major aspects to live a good and peaceful life for each and every person. So I would like to say that factory should be in my place. I have seen a good example in my family. My father in-law’s working place is close to home. Hence he can enjoy his life more as compared to one of my uncle whose factory is far from his home. My father in-law saves a good amount of time which he spends with his family. But my uncle spends more of his daily life in travel therefore he gets tired and has no time for his family.

Finally I would like to say it depends on peoples’ nature whether they want to take advantages or disadvantages from any thing.

[Alan]

Hi,

My suggestions are in CAPITAL LETTERS:

Nowadays, manufacturing of automobiles is prominent. That is because people want to save their time by USING automobiles. Transportation is very easy WITH the use of automobiles. Everywhere world wide the usE of automobiles is increasing day by day. For automobile manufacturing workers, labourERs and officers all are very important. They all play an important role. Therefore the manufacturer should give a chance and take employees' opinions to choose the place for A new automobile factory. In my view it does not matter whether an automobile factory is in my community or A neighbouring community. That is because both have some advantages and disadvantages. These are as follows:

If a new automobile factory is going to open in my place then for a long time there could be pollution problems (noise, water and air). But on the other hand, these problems will not be as much if THE factory will open in my neighbouring community. Automobile factories usually create smoke, liquid waste and noise as well. These problems directly affect human life. Everybody wants to live in a clean atmosphere and likes to drink clean water. Therefore it will be good if an automobile factory does not open in my place.

If an automobile factory opens in my town then people who live in my town and work in the factory can save their time and money. They will not feel fatigue in their day to day life. But if a factory opens in my neighbouring community then people working in the factory will get tired. They will spend lots of time and money in their commute. These are major aspects to live a good and peaceful life for each and every person. So I would like to say that A factory should be in my place. I have seen a good example in my family. My father in-law’s working place is close to home. Hence he can enjoy his life more as compared to one of my uncle'S whose factory is far from his home. My father in-law saves a good amount of time which he spends with his family. But my uncle spends more of his daily life in travel therefore he gets tired and has no time for his family.

Finally I would like to say it depends on peoples’ nature whether they want to take advantages or disadvantages from anything.

Alan
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