TOEFL essay samples: Nowadays, food has become easier to prepare

[Pooja]

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Pooja

Nowadays, food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people live? Use specific reasons and examples to support your response.

I agree that nowadays food has become easier to prepare. This is only because of invention of new equipments. The innovations of gas, mixer, microwave, oven, dish washer and food processor have improved the life of humans. Now people do not scare preparing food. Not only women but also men want to prepare food. Food has become easy to prepare and therefore this change has improved the life of people. These are the following reasons to improve lives:

The direct impact of innovation of food equipments is in the life of women. That is because now women are working outside homes and have shortage of time. But with the help of these equipments they can make food very easily in a short period of time. Using food equipments women save their time, which they spend with their family or in other activities. Now women do not worry to invite their relatives and friends on lunch or dinner. For women, preparation of food is easy and time saving. Now household work is very easy to do therefore women do not feel tired.

By the use of new equipments people can also save money and eat hygienic food. If women use these equipments then they do not want any maid. Therefore they can save money in this way. Maids’ usually do not do household chores as well as the house lady. Most of the time maids’ do not clean the disks as hygienically. Therefore it is not good for health. So if people eat hygienic food then they should do work themselves. Dish washer is very useful in this situation.

Food has become easier to prepare and it has changed the lives of not only women but men as well. It shows their effect on the life of men. Now men are not dependent on women. By the use of food equipments men can prepare food easily. Men are ready to make food by the use of new equipments.

Finally I would like to say the easy preparation of food has completely changed the human life and it shows the direct impact in their life.

[Alan]

I agree that nowadays food has become easier to prepare. This is only because of THE invention of new equipment. The innovations of gas, mixer, microwave, oven, dish washer and food processor have improved the life of humans. Now people ARE not scareD OF preparing food. Not only women but also men want to prepare food. Food has become easy to prepare and therefore this change has improved the life of people. These are the following reasons to improve lives:

The direct impact of innovation of food equipments is in the life of women. That is because now women are working outside home and have A shortage of time. But with the help of these equipments they can make food very easily in a short period of time. Using food equipment women save their time, which they spend with their family or in other activities. Now women do not worry to invite their relatives and friends TO lunch or dinner. For women, preparation of food is easy and time saving. Now household work is very easy to do therefore women do not feel tired.

By the use of new equipment people can also save money and eat hygienic food. If women use thIS equipment then they do not want any maid. Therefore they can save money in this way. Maids usually do not do household chores as well as the house lady. Most of the time maids do not clean the disHES as hygienically. Therefore it is not good for health. So if people eat hygienic food then they should do THE work themselves. A Dish washer is very useful in this situation.

Food has become easier to prepare and it has changed the lives of not only women but men as well. It shows their effect on the life of men. Now men are not dependent on women. By the use of food equipment men can prepare food easily. Men are ready to make food by the use of new equipment.

Finally I would like to say the easy preparation of food has completely changed human life and it shows the direct impact in their life.

Alan
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