Expression: "With reference to the following points..."

[Tom]

Hi

Could you please tell me if the following lines are grammatically correct and natural?

"With reference to the revised Assessment and Examination Policy, I would like to draw your attention to the following points, and subsequently seek your advice for the same."

Tom

[Alan]

Hi,

I could say it sounds a bit official but then maybe that's what's required.

A
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