TOEFL essay sample: Luck has nothig to do with success

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when people suceed it is becuase of hard work Luck has nothing to do with success

"Genius is 99% hard work and 1% Luck," this is a well-quote from Enistein. some people believe that Luck is important to be success and the other believe that success is becuase of hard work. Personally, I belive that luck has nothing to do with success. Success is a resault of our attitude.

Many people may agree that the resault of hard work work is usually fruitful. For example, Thomas Adison tried 99 times to invet the light bulb without success but he didn't give up. On 100th try he suceeded. After this invention, he was asked didn't you think you were wasting your time ? He replied ,"In these 99 times I discovered 99 mistakes I had made".

Secondly, Success in one field relys on how much experience we have in this field , and the experience doesn't come without working. The more you work the more experience you get. For example researchers did and experiment on tow mice. They put the first in a maze and forced this mouse to move to find food. the other mouse was put in an empty tray and food is simply given to him so he didn't had to move to find food. After a while the discovered that the first became more capable of finding food than the other.

some people belive that luck plays a huge part in success. Somtimes luck may play a part in someone's success but this is not usually the case. Morever, hard work will lead you in astraight road unlike waiting for luck.

In conclusion, some people believe that success is a resault of hard work while other believe that luck is a big part of success and I agree with the first opinion. finally life is too short to wait for luck to get you anywhere.

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