What's wrong with these sentences?

[Torsten]

Hi,

I think this sentence should someone be re-written:

Our aim is to aid webmasters starting a new forum or webmasters with already established forums and boosts their boards.

My suggestion:
Our aim is to help webmasters start a new forum or boost their existing boards.

Here is another sentence that screams to be amended:
To do this we hand pick writers and moderators that are top of their field and offer them to you as members of your very own forums.

What do you think?

Thanks,
Torsten
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[Alan]

Hi,

How about:

Our aim is to aid webmasters starting a new forum or webmasters with already established forums TO BOOST their boards. ?

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[cornelius]

How about:

Our aim is to aid webmasters starting a new forum or those with already established forums BOOST their boards
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[prezbucky]

I'd definitely take out "already" -- "established" shows that they are already in use.
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[Ahmadov]

Hi Torsten,

I am with Alan's version of the amended sentence, particularly for "to boost", it is not clear in the original sentence who boosts what though...