TOEFL® essay: Some famous athletes and entertainers earn millions of dollars...

[Gaminuniverse]

Some famous athletes and entertainers earn millions of dollars every year. Do you think these people deserve such high salaries? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

The news reporter said that “Tata Young, Thai super star, get 10 millions for her latest concert.” This news make many people question that this amount of money is too high for a singer who work for few hours in the concert. In my opinion, famous athletes and entertainers deserve a large amount of money because they have to lost privacy, devote most of their time for practice and work, and make their nation is known all over the world.

Super stars and famous athletes are the person of people. They have to loose their privacy in their life. Whatever they do and wherever they go, there are a lot of fans and news reporters follow them.

Then, nobody can be the well-known athletes and entertainers since they were born. They have to devote all of their time and effort for practice. They have to face many hard time before their successfulness.

Lastly, when athletes win the international contest or super star show in international concert, they make their country’s name is promote to everybody in the world.

I think it is suitable if famous athletes and entertainers can earn a large amount of income from their performance because not everybody can do the things they can do.

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TOEFL listening discussions: A conversation between a professor and his assistant

[Alan]

HI,

The news reporter said that “Tata Young, Thai super star, gOt 10 million DOLLARS ?? for her latest concert.” This news makeS many people question that this amount of money is too high for a singer who workS for A few hours in the concert. In my opinion, famous athletes and entertainers deserve a large amount of money because they have to losE privacy, devote most of their time TO practice and work, and make their nation known all over the world.

Super stars and famous athletes are the person of people ???. They have to lose their privacy in their life. Whatever they do and wherever they go, there are a lot of fans and news reporters followING them.

Then, nobody can be A well-known athlete and entertainer WHEN they were born. They have to devote all of their time and effort TO practice. They have to face many hard timeS before THEY ARE SUCCESSFUL.

Lastly, when athletes win AN international contest or super star show in AN international concert, they PROMOTE their country’s name to everybody in the world.

Alan

I think it is suitable if famous athletes and entertainers can earn a large amount of income from their performance because not everybody can do the things they can do.
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