TOEFL essay: In some countries, people are no longer allowed to smoke in many...

[gaminuniverse]

In some countries, people are no longer allowed to smoke in many public places and office buildings. Do you think this is a boo rule or a bad rule? Use specific reasons and details to support your position.

In many years ago, people, especially male, smoke in everyplace that they can. Nowadays, there are many tries to decrease smoking in many countries, which is a good change in my opinion. Smoking leads to many problems both physical and emotional. Smoking not only cause cancer in smoker and others, but also make smoker has bad personality and disturb people in that place.

Cancer is one of the disease that kill large amount of people in each year. Sciences indicated that there are many dangerous components in cigarettes that are the cause of lung cancer and other kind of illnesses. Many family confront desperate situation because they loose a person they love because of smoking. In addition, many people have to spend quite a few money to cure the illness generated from smoking.

Moreover, although a lot of smoker believe that they are fashion leaders and look very smart when they smoke, in fact, others think that smoking is a kind of addiction. Smoker have to use cigarettes to create confident. Many person said that they don’t like to stay with one who smoke because of bad smell form his mouth and body.

Besides, if one smoke in a place such as in the restaurant, office building or bus, it will make other people be uncomfortable. Somebody is allergic to smoke of cigarettes. Smoker will be disgusted.

In sum, the principle to stop smoking by prohibit smoking in public places is a very good notion. It decrease the dead rate from cancer each year. Smoke quitting make one look better in others vision and he will be welcomed in many places or societies.
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[Alan]

HI,

Many years ago, people, especially male, smokeD EVERYWHERE THEY COULD. Nowadays, there are many ATTEMPTS to decrease smoking in many countries, which is a good change in my opinion. Smoking leads to many problems both physical and emotional. Smoking not only causeS cancer in smokerS and others, but also make THE smoker INTO bad personality and disturbS people in that place.

Cancer is one of the diseaseS that killS A large amount of people each year. Science HAS indicated that there are many dangerous components in cigarettes that are the cause of lung cancer and other kindS of illnesses. Many familIES FACE A desperate situation because they lose a person they love because of smoking. In addition, many people have to spend quite a LOT OF money to cure the illness generated from smoking.

Moreover, although a lot of smokerS believe that they are fashion leaders and look very smart when they smoke, in fact, others think that smoking is a kind of addiction. SmokerS have to use cigarettes to create confidenCE. Many PEOPLE saY that they don’t like to stay with SOMEone who smokeS because of THE bad smell form THEIR mouth and body.

Besides, if one smokeS in a place such as in the restaurant, office building or bus, it will make other people FEEL uncomfortable. Somebody WHO is allergic to smoke FROM cigarettes will be disgusted.

In CONCLUSION, the principle OF stopPING smoking by prohibitING smoking in public places is a very good notion. It decreaseS the deaTH rate from cancer each year. Quitting SMOKING makeS YOU look better in other PEOPLE'S EYES and YOU will be welcomed in many places or societies.

Alan
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