Toefl Essays: Parents ate the best teachers

[secilhulya]

Hi!!

Will you please review my essay?

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From our childhood, we meet with lots of people who teach us a variety of knowledge about distinct aspects of the real life. This group of people includes our parents, friends, relatives, school teachers, and even anyone whom we interact during a particular time period of our lifetime. By taking into account all benefits provided by those people, I strongly support the argument that parents are the best teachers. They are the closest to us, and are willing to sacrifice what they have without expecting any compensation.Also no matter how old we are, they have always valuable experiences to share with us . In this essay, I will try to figure out my reasons with regard to why I think parents are the best teachers.

No doubt, our parents are the closest to us especially at younger ages. It can be said as the children grow, the interactions with parents become less obvious and effective. However, since we are a baby, parents develop a huge understanding about our personality, things we like or dislike, our tendency toward specific subjects an so on. They can easily understand what we exactly mean from the expression that appears on our face. Because of the deep understanding of our personality, parents can easily can guide us regarding the future job we will have. This means by teaching or showing different alternatives our parents will be a determinig factor for the rest of our life. Which particular people can replace this responsibility of parents? According to me noone since there are no other people except parents who know us even better than us.

What is more, the relation between children and parents depend on love and intimacy which means parents sacrifice themselves for their children without expecting any compensation. Because of the nature of this relation, they teach us what the best is and what we need throught the life in order to be successful. They teach us how to be strong under difficult conditions, how to adapt ourselves for the changes that appear throught our life, how to distinguish bad and good things, and so on. Since they love us, they will not teach us bad things or get us into bad habits.

Finally, as the new generations choose to marry at older ages, the difference in age between parents and children gets bigger. This means parents have more real life experience that they pass down to their children. Parents mention about the mistakes that they made when they are younger in order to prevent us from experiencing the same faults. This means we can start life one step ahead than our parents did. For instance, my mother always advise me not to tell lies to other people as well as the bad consequents of using drugs since she got firsthand experience of those situations when one of her close friends died because of the overdose.

To sum up, lots of people will have different opinions regarding who the best teacher of our life are depending on their personality, past experiences, past education, and so on. If it comes to me, I strongly in favor of the idea that parents are the best teacher who shape our life in a positive way because of the sevaral reasons that were cited throught the essay. If I am successful and happy now, this is a result of what my parents tought me via their experiences, love, intimacy, closeness to my personality, and so on
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hi from Turkey

[Alan]

HI,

From our childhood, we meet with lots of people who teach us a variety of DIFFERENT TYPES OF knowledge about distinct aspects of real life. This group of people includes our parents, friends, relatives, school teachers, and even anyone whom we interact WITH during a particular time period IN our lifetime. By taking into account all THE benefits provided by those people, I strongly support the argument that parents are the best teachers. They are the closest to us, and are willing to sacrifice what they have without expecting any compensation.Also no matter how old we are, they have always valuable experiences to share with us . In this essay, I will try to figure out my reasons with regard to why I think parents are the best teachers.

No doubt, our parents are the closest to us especially at younger ages. It can be said as children grow, the interaction with parents becomeS less obvious and effective. However, since we are a baby, parents develop a huge understanding about our personality, things we like or dislike, our tendency toward specific subjects an so on. They can easily understand what we exactly mean from the expression that appears on our face. Because of the deep understanding of our personality, parents can easily guide us regarding the future job we will have. This means by teaching or showing different alternatives our parents will be a determinig factor for the rest of our life. Which particular people can replace this responsibility of parents? According to me noone since there are no other people except parents who know us even better than WE DO.

What is more, the relationSHIP between children and parents dependS on love and intimacy which means parents sacrifice themselves for their children without expecting any compensation. Because of the nature of this relationSHIP, they teach us what the best is and what we need througHOUT life in order to be successful. They teach us how to be strong under difficult conditions, how to adapt ourselves TO the changes that appear through our life, how to distinguish bad and good things, and so on. Since they love us, they will not teach us bad things or get us into bad habits.

Finally, as the new generations choose to marry at older ages, the difference in age between parents and children gets bigger. This means parents have more real life experience that they pass down to their children. Parents mention about the mistakes that they made when they are younger in order to prevent us from experiencing the same faults. This means we can start life one step ahead OF our parents. For instance, my mother always adviseS me not to tell lies to other people as well as the bad consequenCE of using drugs since she got firsthand experience of those situations when one of her close friends died because of AN overdose.

To sum up, lots of people will have different opinions regarding who the best teacher of our life IS depending on their personality, past experiences, past education, and so on. If it comes to me, I AM strongly in favor of the idea that parents are the best teacherS who shape our life in a positive way because of the sevEral reasons that were cited through the essay. If I am successful and happy now, this is a result of what my parents tAught me via their experiences, love, intimacy, closeness to my personality, and so on

Remember the spelling of the two prepositions: THROUGH and THROUGHOUT

Alan
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[secilhulya]

thanks for your help Alan

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