Expression: 'In a meeting with the manager...'

[Tom]

Hi

Would you say that the following sentences are correct and natural?

1- In a meeting with the manager, all the areas regarding the events to be conducted in September were highlighted.

2- The hospital was filled with terrified people come to make sure whether or not their children were alive.

Tom

[Mister Micawber]

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#1 is a little wordy (or maybe it is just vague), and in #2, 'make sure' makes the parents seem a little cavalier, I think; otherwise, they seem OK to me.
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[Tom]

Many thanks, Mister Micawber,

Could you please rephrase them so that they sound a bit natural?

Tom

[Tom]

Where are you, Mister Micawber?

Tom

[Mister Micawber]

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Something like this is an improvement (in my estimation):

1- In a meeting with the manager, all the concerns regarding the September events were highlighted.

2- The hospital was filled with terrified people come to find out whether their children were alive.
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Canadian-American native speaker
who teaches English for a living at Mister Micawber's
ESL cafe: Interview with Mister Micawber