TOEFL Essay Samples: Parents are the best teachers

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents are the best teachers. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

When a child is born, someone with whom he feels closest to in this world are his parents. They are the first to hold him and get him prepared to face this world. In my opinion, parents are the best teachers for any person in this world. I feel the same due to the following reasons.

When a child puts his first foot in this world, from that moment only, he gets the support of his parents. They teach him to walk, to eat, to speak and everything that one needs to learn to survive. Thus, he sees them as the first mentor he could have.

Parents tell their kid the difference between right and wrong. When the baby grows up and gets the taste of this world full of challenges and competition, he meets all kinds of people, some good fellows and some bad. Parents make sure that their child is on the path of righteousness. For instance, adolescence lures everyone towards drugs, alcohol and other immoral activities. Hence, the right guidance a child can get from are his parents at home.

Parents are child’s first role models. He imitates everything that his mother and father do, how they behave, talk or deal a particular situation. For example, a young girl at home plays a mother with her friends or siblings and tries to emulate her mother’s habits and behavior at home. So, both mother and father play a pivotal role in developing a child’s personality.

I would again say that since parents are the one who are mentors of their child in all walks of life, they are incomparable to others and consequently the best teachers.

[Alan]

When a child is born, someone with whom he feels closest to in this world are his parents. They are the first to hold him and get him prepared to face this world. In my opinion, parents are the best teachers for any person in this world. I feel thIS IS DUE to the following reasons.

When a child TAKES HIS FIRST STEP in this world, from that moment only, he gets the support of his parents. They teach him to walk, to eat, to speak and everything that one needs to learn to survive. Thus, he sees them as the first mentor he could have.

Parents tell their kid the difference between right and wrong. When the baby grows up and gets the taste of this world full of challenges and competition, he meets all kinds of people, some good fellows and some bad. Parents make sure that their child is on the path of righteousness. For instance, adolescence lures everyone towards drugs, alcohol and other immoral activities. Hence, the right guidance a child can get from are his parents at home.

Parents are A child’s first role models. He imitates everything that his mother and father do, how they behave, talk or deal WITH a particular situation. For example, a young girl at home plays AS a mother with her friends or siblings and tries to emulate her mother’s habits and behavior at home. So, both mother and father play a pivotal role in developing a child’s personality.

I would again say that since parents are the oneS who are mentors of their child in all walks of life, they are incomparable to others and consequently the best teachers.


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