TOEFL® essay: Most of the people say that the internet is the most important...

[*Delta*]

please can you check my toefl sample and my spelling??

Most of the people say that the internet is the most important invention.
Do you agree or disagree with them?

There's no doubt that the internet has become such an important machine in our lives. Every one uses the internet nowadays for many different reasons. Some people study online while others try to harm other people by violating their privacy.

No one can deny that the internet has helped all of us in many fields , it has made things easier , faster and even simple to use at any age. For me, I agree for sure that the internet is so important in our lives but I also think that it depends on who is using it , in other word it can be good sometimes and bad the other times.

More over, it can helps people to study, to read and even to gain information and new skills. furthermore, it can help bussniess men or women to do their work online or even to have an online course so it can make it much easier for them rather than travelling abord to do their jobs. as well as it can be used by kids to play and to amuse them selves by playing games and learning new words.

But on the other hand, using the internet can be so dangerouse because some people may try to steal pravite things such as pictures or important files. But after that you can know what are you using the internet for so you can know if you're violating something that isn't belong to you or not. Thus it's all about the user of the internet and his will to do eaither the good or the bad thing.

In conclusion, no one can give away this intelligent machine because it really has helped us in many ways and has changed our lives alot but you just have to know how to use it right and how to ta benefits from it.

[Torsten]

Dear Delta,

Many thanks for joining our forum and posting your essay.
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Let me know what you think.
Also, are you preparing for the TOEFL? If so, what do you want to study and where?

Regards,
Torsten
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[*Delta*]

hey dear
thnkx alot for your nice words
and yes am preparing for the toefl test to attend the unviersity
but am not sure yet what field i'll join
plzz dear can you check my essay?

[Alan]

Hi young delta,

There's no doubt that the internet has become such an important machine in our lives. Everyone uses the internet nowadays for many different reasons. Some people study online while others try to harm other people by violating their privacy.

No one can deny that the internet has helped all of us in many fields , it has made things easier , faster and even simpleR to use at any age. For me, I agree for sure that the internet is so important in our lives but I also think that it depends on who is using it , in other wordS it can be good sometimes and bad the other times.

Moreover, it can help people to study, to read and even to gain information and new skills. furthermore, it can help buSIness men or women to do their work online or even to have an online course so it can make it much easier for them rather than travelling abROAd to do their jobs. as well as THAT it can be used by kids to play and to amuse themselves by playing games and learning new words.

But on the other hand, using the internet can be so dangerous because some people may try to steal prIVAte things such as pictures or important files. But after that you can know what are you using the internet for so you can know if you're violating something that DOESN'T belong to you or not. Thus it's all about the user of the internet and his will to do Either the good or the bad thing.

In conclusion, no one can give away this intelligent machine because it really has helped us in many ways and has changed our lives a lot but you just have to know how to use it CORRECTLY and how to taKE benefits from it.
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This is good. I just hope that it is all your own work!

Alan
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English as a Second Language
You can read my ESL story Well, Hello!

[*Delta*]

thnkx for rating it
but it's really my own work
nice to hear from you anyway