Could you please amend this certificate?

[Torsten]

Hi,

Could you please take a look at the following and amend/edit the text where necessary? It's a translation of a German certificate. I know that the text contains a lot of buzzwords and might sound awkward at times so I'll appreciate any suggestions. Many thanks. Torsten

Certificate of Participation

Name ......

Birthdate .....

Address ....

has participated in the Outplacement and Qualification Training which consisted of 80 training units and ran from [date] to [date].

Contents of English Language Training and Cross-Cultural Competence Module:

Business communication
Telephoning
Taking the minutes
Scheduling meetings and appointments
Business organization
Creating and analyzing organizational charts
Composing job descriptions
Recognizing elements and structures of contracts
Using performance review systems
Team management
Negotiating based on the Harvard Principle
Cross cultural training and diversity strategies
Using self-improvement techniques
Analyzing success principles of international companies

We wish [Name] all the best for his/her future and thank him/her for taking part in the program.
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Test Of English for International Communication
TOEIC Preparation & TOEIC Vocabulary

[Mister Micawber]

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Certificate of Participation


This is to certify that

Name ......

Date of Birth .....

Address ....

has [successfully] participated in the Outplacement and Qualification Training ([date] to [date]), consisting of 80 training units.

Contents of English Language Training and Cross-Cultural Competence Module:

Business communication
Telephoning
Taking minutes
Scheduling meetings and appointments
Business organization
Creating and analyzing organizational charts
Composing job descriptions
Recognizing elements and structures of contracts
Using performance review systems
Team management
Negotiating based on the Harvard Principle
Cross-cultural training and diversity strategies
Using self-improvement techniques
Analyzing success principles of international companies

We wish to thank [Name] for taking part in the program, and offer our best wishes for the future.
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Canadian-American native speaker
who teaches English for a living at Mister Micawber's
ESL cafe: Interview with Mister Micawber

[Torsten]

Hi Charles,

Thanks a lot for your speedy response -- you've made my day.
Talk to you soon.
Torsten
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Test Of English for International Communication
TOEIC Preparation & TOEIC Vocabulary