TOEFL essay samples: Hiring Employees

[Tabby]

Hi Alan/Torsten,
Please review my essay.My test is due in two days.
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-Tabby

Businesses should hire employees for their entire lives. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and details support to support your answer.

Nobody is perfect. But anybody can become better day by day. A sense of competition, curiosity and being acknowledged drives one to the path of perfection. All these traits in an employee may take him and his company to great heights. Businesses should recruit such employees and must be able to keep these assets alive. I disagree with the notion that employees should be recruited for their entire lives because, in my opinion, if a company hires an employee for his lifetime, his sense of competition, growth and ability to produce results would die gradually. And it would not prove beneficial for the businesses and the young talent as well.

Hiring an employee for life may end his attribute of being competitive at the workplace.
For instance, a youngster who joins a company as a fresher, tries to perform at his best during his probation period as he knows his job would be lost, if he doesn’t do better than others. This sense of competitiveness in his attitude makes him stay. On the other hand, an employee who knows his job is not probationary may lose his competitiveness slowly.

Desire to grow may die in an employee, if he keeps working in the same company throughout his life.His work would turn out be monotonous over a period of time. He may stop enjoying his work, if he doesn’t get the opportunity to learn new things.

Having an idea of working in the same business throughout one’s life, no matter how one performs, may prove a loss to the company and the employee both. If, an employee doesn’t have the fear of losing his job to someone more efficient, he will not be able to produce desired results.

Assume a company, where majority of the employees is old. Since, most of them were hired for their lifetime ,when the company had just started. The present picture of the company may give an idea to the consumers that it has lost its freshness and vigor. Also, making job positions permanent may end up possibilities of a company to hire fresh talent or other people of new skills and expertise, which may take the company to greater heights. Young minds may have to wait longer to get a suitable position for themselves because of occupancy on these positions for lifetime.

Thus, recruiting workmen for their entire lives may not be a beneficial policy for the company and the employee both.

[Alan]

Nobody is perfect. But anybody can become better day by day. A sense of competition, curiosity and being acknowledged drives one to the path of perfection. All these traits in an employee may take him and his company to great heights. Businesses should recruit such employees and must be able to keep these assets alive. I disagree with the notion that employees should be recruited for their entire lives because, in my opinion, if a company hires an employee for his lifetime, his sense of competition, growth and ability to produce results would die gradually. And it would not prove beneficial for the businesses and the young talent as well.

Hiring an employee for life may end his attribute/QUALITY of being competitive at the workplace.
For instance, a youngster who joins a company as a fresher, tries to perform at his best during his probation period as he knows his job would be lost, if he doesn’t do better than others. This sense of competitiveness in his attitude makes him stay. On the other hand, an employee who knows his job is not probationary may lose his competitiveness slowly.

Desire to grow may die in an employee, if he keeps working in the same company throughout his life.His work would turn out TO be monotonous over a period of time. He may stop enjoying his work, if he doesn’t get the opportunity to learn new things.

Having an idea of working in the same business throughout one’s life, no matter how one performs, may prove a loss to the company and the employee both. If, an employee doesn’t have the fear of losing his job to someone more efficient, he will not be able to produce desired results.

Assume a company, where THE majority of the employees ARE old. Since, most of them were hired for their lifetime ,when the company had just started. The present picture of the company may give an idea to the consumers that it has lost its freshness and vigor. Also, making job positions permanent may end possibilities of a company to hire fresh talent or other people of new skills and expertise, which may take the company to greater heights. Young minds may have to wait longer to get a suitable position for themselves because of THE occupancy on these LIFETIME positions
Thus, recruiting workmen for their entire lives may not be a beneficial policy BOTH for the company and the employee .

Alan
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