TOEFL essay: Classmates are a more important influence than parents on a child's

[mahdi]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Classmates are a more
important influence than parents on a child's success in school. Use specific
reasons and examplesto support your answer.

Child's success depends on different things .one of them is childeren's
inteligence. A children may dosenot have good classmates and good parents
but he/she is a sucessful student because he/she has good teacher and he/she
is clever.But if we wnat to compare classmates and parents influence on a
child's succes regardless of other factors we should say that each of them
has their own on a child's personality and his/her success.

parents who prepare a quiet environment for their children at home usally
have successful childs compared with those who donot prepare this situation.
parents who always beat their childs and enforce them to work in factories
and farms and donot have good manner with their childs can not nurture their
childs properly.

Classmates have also their influence on their friends personality and
success . Good fiends have always good influence and bad friends have bad
influence. Good friends always encourage their friends to learn and help each
other in learning but bad fiends learn to a children bad manners like lying
and swear.

all in all as I said childs personality and their success depends on different
things .

[Alan]

A Child's success depends on different things .one of them is childREn's
inteLligence. A child may not have good classmates and good parents
but he/she is a sucessful student because he/she has A good teacher and he/she
is clever.But if we WANT to compare classmates' and parents' influence on a
child's succes regardless of other factors we should say that each of them
has their own on a child's personality and his/her success.

Parents who prepare a quiet environment for their children at home usUally
have successful childREN compared with those who do not prepare this situation.
Parents who always beat their childREN and force them to work in factories
and farms and do not have good manner with their childREN cannot nurture their
childREN properly.

Classmates have also their influence on their friends' personality and
success . Good fRiends always HAVE A good influence and bad friends have A bad
influence. Good friends always encourage their friends to learn and help each
other in learning but bad fRiends TEACH children bad manners like lying
and sweaINGr.

All in all as I said, A child's personality and their success depends on different
things .

Alan

Note: CHILD singular CHILDREN plural
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