TOEFL essay: Shopping for a special emotion

[Rongconrangsun]

Like everyone, shopping is my hobbit. But not at all, I just like to go shopping when I have special emotion. Sometime I feel happy or feel sad, I usually go shopping to solve my sadness or feel happier. Besides, sometime I think everything is so boring and I go shopping. Specially, I can take my interested things. I'm like everyone, specially kids, like everything which is new, beautiful, and colorful. That is main reason to go shopping. Moreover, shopping is the best way for me to relax after school. Ans it is also a best way to kill time when I'm really free and have nothing to do. Although I love shopping, I can't spend so much money for it. So I just may take a look everything around me. That's a good way because I can save time, save money and enjoy colorful ones. In my opinion, shopping helps me to lose my weight. It makes me do exercise and feels comfortable. In addition, every time I go shopping, I can stay beside my friends or my family to decide which one should be bought . I feel so happy and funny. With all advantages, there are nothing for me to hate shopping.

[Alan]

Like everyone, shopping is my HOBBY. But not at all, I just like to go shopping when I have A special FEELING. Sometime I feel happy or feel sad, I usually go shopping to REMOVE ??my sadness or feel happier. Besides, sometimeS I think everything is so boring and I go shopping. Specially, I can take my interested things. I'm like everyone, specially kids, I like everything which is new, beautiful, and colorful. That is THE main reason to go shopping. Moreover, shopping is the best way for me to relax after school. AnD it is also THE best way to kill time when I'm really free and have nothing to do. Although I love shopping, I can't spend TOO much money ON it. So I just may take a look AT everything around me. That's a good way because I can save time, save money and enjoy colorful THINGS. In my opinion, shopping helps me to lose weight. It makes me do exercise and IT feels comfortable. In addition, every time I go shopping, I can stay WITH my friends or my family to decide which one should be bought FOR. I feel so happy and funny. With all THESE advantages, there IS nothing for me to hate shopping.


Alan
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