TOEFL essay samples: Childhood is the happiest time of a person's life

[Johny]

I am 25 years old and I can surely say that childhood is a wounderful time of my life. Many adults want to come back childhood, e.t. they want to be kid again. But some people don't want to recollect their childhood. You want to ask me "Why they don't want to recollect their childhood ?" I will try to answer your question.

Children who growing up in a family, who surrounded with love and care recollect their childhood as the happiest time of theirs life. In holidays when family is gathering people recollect their childhood. They recollect first day of school, first love, some of them first kiss.

Some peoples don't want recollect their childhood, I think becouse their childhood were unhappy and hard. Unfortunately not everyone grows up in family, surrounded with love and care.

However the childhood is the happiest time of my life. I always recollect childhood with a smile upon my face. So for some people the childhood is the happiest time of theirs life and for others no.

[Alan]

I am 25 years old and I can CERTAINLY say that childhood is a wOnderful time of my life. Many adults want to GO back TO childhood, I.E. they want to be kidS again. But some people don't want to RECALL/REMEMBER their childhood. You want to ask me "Why they don't want to REMEMBER their childhood ?" I will try to answer your question.

Children who grow up in a family, surrounded with love and care REMEMBER their childhood as the happiest time of their life. In holidays when THE family MEETS UP people recollect their childhood. They REMBER THEIR first day AT school, THEIR first love, some of them THEIR first kiss.

Some people don't want TO REMEMBER their childhood, I think becouse their childhood wAS unhappy and hard. Unfortunately not everyone grows up in A family, surrounded with love and care.

However childhood is the happiest time of my life. I always REMEBER childhood with a smile upon my face. So for some people childhood is the happiest time of their life and for others noT.


Alan
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[Johny]

Hello Alan, Thank you for your HELP! I have question, could you tell me, what is best way to achive success in writing section of the TOEFL?

[TranTolinh]

Dear teacher,
Can you shed light on me with some grammar problems ?
1: You changed "recollect" to "remember/recall" ; I checked their meanings and saw nothing different between them . Here is one extract: