Help For The Poem...

[Volcano1985]

Anyone can check the poem please?

Do not think that i don’t know
The rules of the games
But i don’t prefer
I have tried,i didn’t get taste
I am waiting till happens

Make me cry,it suits(?) you
Human this ,of course gets used to this too
You are my fu ck up anyway
Go!!!your going is my rescue

Does the love die reason pride?
Can flower grow up without rain ?
A few words ,a last looking
You are going to unknown adventures
From my heart

[Mister Micawber]

.
The obscenity is terribly out of register with the rest of your poem.
Capitalize the first person singular subject personal pronoun.
'Please' is spelt thus; it is rude to abbreviate a courtesy.
Your poem has no consistent meter or rhythm.
.
_________________
Native English teacher at Mister Micawber's

[Alan]

Hi,

A good test to see whether your piece stands up and has legs is to explain to another person what exactly you mean line by line. If you make any headway with that, I would then rewrite the whole thing.

Alan
_________________
English as a Second Language
You can read my ESL story Present Simple

[Volcano1985]

[Volcano1985]