Mon May 28, 2007 17:18 pm TOEFL Essays: People attend college or university for many different reasons |
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I would appreciate it if anyone evaluate my essay.
Q: People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
A: I think it is not always necessary for many people to attend college or university. But in fact, many people enter uniersity, or intend to enter one. I think that there are three reasons which are to get more carrer opportunity, to earn more salary, and to meet more people.
Through attending university, we can improve carrer opportunity. In many work, any degree is required. For instance, I want to work at international organization in the future to help disadvantaged people. But to work at international organization, it is need to take BA, MS or Ph.D degree. In other wards, I can get opportunity to work there through attending university.
Secondly attending university, they can get more salary. In statistics class, I investigated the relation between salary and education to apply statistical method. And I got the valid consequent that there are clear relation between salary and education. The higher education they receive, the more salary they earn.
Finally I strongly point out that there are many chance to meet various people in university. For example, in my university there are many foreign students from China, US, Thai, and so on. I often talk with them, feel cultural differences, and think unconscious way of thought behind culture. I spent very precious time. But if I would not attend university, it is difficult to meet such people.
In consequent, I think that the reasons why people attend university are to get more carrer opportunity, to earn more salary, and to meet more people. |
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Takashi Kaneda New Member
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