TOEFL essay: Successful students do well in school for many different reasons

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Successful students do well in school for many different reasons. Identify one or two important personal characteristics that help a student succeed in school. Use specific examples to show why you think these characteristics are important for student success.

Successful students do well in school for lots of reasons, which are vary from person to person. But among them some characteristics are more frequently seen in successful students personalities. The most common characteristics are regularity, attention, thoughtful, as well as independent in taking decisions.

As we are discussing about the success in schools specially so the first and most important characteristic is being a responsible person. They should attend their classes on time and not to miss even a single class. If, so then they definitely consulted with their instructor or a student to help them, they do have legitimate excuses and reasons for not attending the class. In case of any problem or question regarding to their assignments, they consult with their instructor to discuss about the issue they had. They also pay attention to their studies and remain attentive in their class even if the lecture is little bored. They also participate in class discussions even if their attempts are clumsy and difficult. They seem driven to complete their assignments. They complete their assignments on time, and present their work with strong information and ideas and reasonable arrangement, if they had a little lousy information too.

Second and the most important characteristic for successful students is they are active for their grades. They fight with themselves for getting higher grades and tried to improve their work. To overcome this, they are challenging and positive towards their goal. They also found different paths while achieving their goal. By struggling and hard working helped them to define their aim, so they easily move forward. They specially believe in them, that they can do everything. They always encourage themselves, if in case they are losing their path. Because from that their emerges lots of paths to help them out. They are also independent in their thoughts and taking decisions. Along with all these reasons there is most important outcome is from the support of the family that helped and motivate them for continuous struggling.

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Well the essay is,

Whether people pay income taxes is a question that interests everyone who had ever worked. While some people believe that the payment of taxes should not be required, others argued that income tax is important revenue for the government. Which of these two positions do you agree with and why? Give reasons and specific details to support your answer.

[Alan]

Successful students do well in school for many different reasons. Identify one or two important personal characteristics that help a student succeed in school. Use specific examples to show why you think these characteristics are important for student success.

Successful students do well in school for lots of reasons, which CAN vary from person to person. But among them some characteristics are more frequently seen in successful students' personalities. The most common characteristics are regularity, attention, thoughtfulNESS, as well as independenCE in taking decisions.

As we are discussing the success in schools specially, so the first and most important characteristic is being a responsible person. They should attend their classes on time and not to miss even a single class. If so then they HAVE definitely consulted with their instructor or a student to help them, they do have legitimate excuses and reasons for not attending the class. In case of any problem or question regarding their assignments, they consult with their instructor to discuss the issue they haVE. They also pay attention to their studies and remain attentive in their class even if the lecture is A little borING. They also participate in class discussions even if their attempts are clumsy and difficult. They seem driven to complete their assignments. They complete their assignments on time, and present their work with SOLID information and ideas and reasonable arrangement, if they had a little information too.

Second and the most important characteristic for successful students is THAT they are activeLY SEEKING BETTER grades. They fight with themselves TO get higher grades and trY to improve their work. To overcome this, they are challenging and positive towards their goal. They also found different paths while achieving their goal. Struggling and working HARD helped them to define their aim, so they easily move forward. They specially believe in them, that they can do everything. They always encourage themselves, if they are losing their path because from that theRE emergE lots of paths to help them out. They are also independent in their thoughts and taking decisions. Along with all these reasons THE most important outcome is from the support of the family that helped and motivate them for continuous struggling.

You must decide whether you want to write your essay in the present tense or the past tense. You use both in the same sentence and that makes it very confusing.

Alan
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