TOEFL® Essay: How do movies or television influence people's behavior?

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How do movies or television influence people's behavior? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.

Media always have influence people's behavior. Most of the times it is totally different than the reality.There are some educational movies,cartoon films and movies on fairy tales. Some of them are inspiring and encouraging and motivating. And there are some action, violent and horror movies also.The daily News on TV which are important too.They are also addictive and time consuming. They all have different effects on different people.
For children there are lots of educational movies some of them are Disney,Leap Frog which helps children to learn alphabets, counting, colors etc.Cartoon films which make them happy and teaches them a lot like shearing,helping and caring.And those simple acts helps them to be a better person.Fairy tales shows some amazing things which broadens the imagination power of the kids.
Some movies based on real life are motivating.Those movies make you feel that even you can do things which are out of your reach, you want to work hard if you watch such movies.Inspiring and encouraging movies are also there,they help you in certain ways.And besides that they are entertaining.
But some television shows and movies are violent.Lots of action scenes,and murders, terrors which are not good. They influence the kids to act like that.Horror shows and movies are even worst, some people can't even sleep if they watch it.Other disadvantages of movies and TV shows are: they are addictive, time consuming.Because of that your outdoor activities reduces and it automatically affect your health due to less physical activity.Besides that the rays coming out of the television are harmful to the eyes.This may be the reason behind using glasses and lenses these days.
To conclude, Television and Movies have both advantage and disadvantage.It will teach you all goo and bad stuffs.It all depend upon parents and people watching it.For kids parents have to guide them,and tell them that this is good you should do that.But if something is wrong you got to tell them immediately.For adults,they know everything what to take and what to avoid from that.They can read the instruction before watching the movie.
All in all,Guide yourself while watching all kinds of shows and movies.And always try to get something good from that.

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