Could I have my IELTS writing graded here?

[Quan11287]

I'm very sorry if I'm spamming this sub-topic. Just, I am beginning to practice for the IELTS in the coming months and haven't been able to find out anywhere to have my writing graded and corrected so far. I'm wondering if I can post my pieces of writing here for correction ? I really get stuck now. Please help me :( !

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[Englishuser]

Hi quan11287,

I am pleased to learn of your commitment to sit for the IELTS test. Have you got the official IELTS specimen materials? Regarding your posting essays for comment here, are you mostly interested in error correction or would you rather like to find out what your writing band score could be?

All the best

EU

[Quan11287]

I would rather have my writing corrected for improvement. However, if possible, please score my pieces of writing so that I can assess my progress more effectively :)

[Englishuser]

Hi quan11287,

You can post your IELTS essays here if you like.

All the best

EU

[Quan11287]

Thank you very much :D !!!

[Vahidm65]

hi there englishuser
can i send my writings to be checked and scored?
how?

[Nemov02]

Hi Englishuser!

Can I also post my writing exercises here for your grading?
I will take IELTS next month and I am preparing really hard for this exam.
Thank you very much.

[Donnadonna]

Hi Englishuser ^^
I'm studying Ielts but my writing skill is very bad. I will have an exam in the next 3 week and I really want someone who can help me. It's lucky for me because I know this website. Could you help me to check my writing? Thanks in advance.

Topic:
Some people claim that what people eat in many Western countries is unhealthy and that their diet is getting worse. Critics say that these countries should change their diet.
What are your opinions on this?

My essay

In recent year, foodstuff has received considerable concerns among Western communities due to the belief that they are unhealthy and lead to the poor quality of Western people’s diet. Therefore, changing the diet to ensure healthy life is a necessary task.

It can not be denied that Western people tend to face health problems resulting from unwholesome food and unbalance diet. It is true in some countries such as the UK and the US that people are gaining weight and have high risk of obesity. Their diets always contain lots of meats and processed food that are not good for health. Especially the widespread use of fast food is the major reason explaining to the high level of people suffering from obesity in these countries. The popularity of fast food is the evidence of unbalanced diet of Western people, with too much fat, sugar and less vegetables. There are also many latent diseases which can be the serious threat to Western people unless they make some changes in their diet.

What should be done is changing food ration. Eliminating the existence of fast food in the menu, replacing them by large amount of vegetables and fresh fruit can also make an effort to balance the diet. Moreover, alternating menu frequently can excite people’s crave for food, hence, simulating them to absorb more nutrition. In the long-term, the positive consequence wll be seen.

As indicated above, Western people's diet is unhealthy that leads to the high level of people suffering health problems such as obesity. Therefore, changing their diet is the best way to address this problem.