TOEFL essay: Only people who earn a lot of money are successful in lives

[musica]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Only people who earn a lot of money are successful in lives. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Some people seem to believe that the richer one is, the more he gets success. Nevertheless, I disagree that just only wealthy people are successful in lives.

Throughout my life, I have fortunately seen a lot of successful people. Those are not well-off, but they have a feeling of well-being. My beloved parents, for example, they feel quite happy because they have a good son and I myself do not add more burdens upon them. They also have good jobs and good health, which enables them to bolster their family up till now. Besides, although both of them do not have a lot of money, they still gain whatever they need, making them feel happiness in lives. All of these demonstrate that we can gain success in no need of wealth.

Furthermore, I have known many people gaining achievements by winning recognition. Jesus Christ, for instance, he was born in a poor family. He had dedicated his lifetime to helping people transcend suffering and attain happiness. His teachings guide people to extend compassion and forgiveness toward others. Subsequently, the teachings of him have been incrementally accepted and he finally became the founder of Christianity. Though the Lord Jesus passed away long time ago, the Holy Bible are always believed by worldwide Christians. Besides, he himself also gains recognition from many people all over the world.

Last but not least, I also consider education the symbol of people’s success. Education is the ticket paving the way for achievement and I have already proved it true myself. I am now assured that I have much success to a certain level. That is I could matriculate and have just graduated with honor. I am currently happy and ready to be considered for a decent job. Another remarkable person is my music teacher. He obtains his Ph.D. with GPA 3.98 from a distinguished university. He is able to utilize his deeply thorough knowledge to manage his work and to sharpen his life. All of these can prove that it is not only wealth that shows people’s success.

Having a lot of money does not always define people’s achievements. There are therefore many people who feel quite successful although they are not rich. It is true money may reflect people’s success, but it does not guarantee we will be happy in lives. We all, however, have different criteria that judge our own achievements. As for me, wellbeing, education, and recognition do define my invaluable success. If the things you have make you feel happy, then why should you strive for more money?

Thank you
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[Alan]

Hi,

Some people seem to believe that the richer one is, the more ONE gets success. Nevertheless, I disagree that just only wealthy people are successful in THEIR lives.

Throughout my life, I have fortunately seen a lot of successful people. Those are not well-off, but they have a feeling of well-being. My beloved parents, for example, they feel quite happy because they have a good son and I myself do not add more burdens upon them. They also have good jobs and good health, which enables them to bolster their family up till now. Besides, although both of them do not have a lot of money, they still EARN whatever they need, making them feel happiness in THEIR lives. All of thIS demonstrateS that we can gain success WITH no need of wealth.

Furthermore, I have known many people gaining achievements by winning recognition. Jesus Christ, for instance, he was born in a poor family. He had dedicated his lifetime to helping people transcend suffering and attain happiness. His teachings guide people to extend compassion and forgiveness toward others. Subsequently, the teachings of hiS have been incrementally accepted and he finally became the founder of Christianity. Though the Lord Jesus passed away A long time ago, the Holy Bible IS always believed by worldwide Christians. Besides, he himself also gains recognition from many people all over the world.

Last but not least, I also consider education the symbol of people’s success. Education is the ticket FOR paving the way for achievement and I have already proved it true myself. I am now assured that I have much success to a certain level. That is I could matriculate and have just graduated with honor. I am currently happy and ready to be considered for a decent job. Another remarkable person is my music teacher. He obtainED his Ph.D. with GPA 3.98 from a distinguished university. He is able to utilize his deeply thorough knowledge to manage his work and to sharpen his life. All of these can prove that it is not only wealth that shows people’s success.

Having a lot of money does not always define people’s achievements. There are therefore many people who feel quite successful although they are not rich. It is true money may reflect people’s success, but it does not guarantee we will be happy in OUR lives. We all, however, have different criteria that judge our own achievements. As for me, wellbeing, education, and recognition do define my invaluable success. If the things you have make you feel happy, then why should you strive for more money?

Alan
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[musica]

Thank you so much Alan, I realize that I must be more careful.
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[guptravijdr]

I too want to send my Toefl essay.How can I do this?

[Alan]

Hi,

Just copy it on to your posting.

Alan
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You can read my EFL story Three Letters for You?