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#2 (permalink) Fri Aug 24, 2007 21:02 pm Hello. TOEFL ESSAY:Many people visit museums when they travelto new places. Why |
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Hello , Alen
What do you think about the essay?
I know that the shape of it a bit wrong but the copy and paste didn't go wright.
Thank you so much for your help.
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Valeriya New Member
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#3 (permalink) Sat Sep 15, 2007 12:20 pm TOEFL essay: Many people visit museums when they travel to new places |
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Hi,
Your essay seems relatively good. You satisfactorily respond to the requirements of the task and your vocabulary and grammar would hardly get in your way on most standardised ESL tests.
All the best
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#4 (permalink) Sat Sep 15, 2007 12:57 pm TOEFL essay: Many people visit museums when they travel to new places |
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| Valeriya wrote: |
Many people visit museums when they travel to new places. Why do you think people visit museums? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays we are seeing a great increase in number of museum visitors all over the world. Museums have become one of the most popular attractions for visitors in cities and countries. In my opinion there are a few main reasons that travelers and local residents have developed a desire to visit museums.
First, the interest to obtain more information about the place they visit. Museums are always the most profound sources of information related to the city in which they are located. Visitors in Amsterdam, Holland would gain the best information about the city and area at the local museums.
Second, the desire for historical knowledge. As a wise man once said There is no future without past. People nowadays feel a hunger for history. They wish to reveal and discover their roots. Unfortunately, political and social circumstances distributed nations all over the world. Travelers in different countries visit museums to find out/obtain more information about their families and their families' lives in the country.
Visiting museums is a primary way to expose yourself to history and other interesting information. And the most important thing is that the information contained in museums is fully accurate and reliable. |
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