TOEFL essay: A Persuasive Essay Supporting the Positive Effect of Classroom...

[vuralorion]

Hello. It is me again. Here is my essay. Can you please evaluate it? I know that body is not strong enough and it is not long enough. Thanks

A Persuasive Essay Supporting the Positive Effect of Classroom Capacity on Educational Quality.

Do you know that today we have many schools with classrooms of 50 to 100 students in Turkey? I agree with the opinion that the educational improvement of students lies on the number of students attended to the classroom. Bringing limitations on classroom capacity affects the students not only educationally but also mentally.

First, students get more chance to participate the courses in a relatively smaller classroom compared to a larger classroom. Instructor's ability to address each student makes them more eager to offer their ideas and bring new aspects to the topic discussed.

Furthermore, as students are allowed to join the discussions about the lecture, they improve their understanding of topics and subjects.

Most importantly, when teachers have less student to take care of, they will also have more time to concern with the students' both educational and mental defficiencies.

In conclusion, to put restrictions on the number of students in a single classroom, gives students more opportunity to prepare themselves for both employment and social life. Also it helps teachers offer more attention to their students and give them more either educationally and mentally.

[Alan]

A Persuasive Essay Supporting the Positive Effect of Classroom Capacity on Educational Quality.

Do you know that today we have many schools with classrooms of 50 to 100 students in Turkey? I agree with the opinion that the educational improvement of students lies on the number of students attendedING IN the classroom. Bringing limitations on classroom capacity affects the students not only educationally but also mentally.

First, students get more chance to participate IN the courses in a relatively smaller classroom compared to a larger classroom. AN instructor's ability to address each student makes them more eager to offer their ideas and bring new aspects to the topic discussed.

Furthermore, as students are allowed to join the discussions about the lecture, they improve their understanding of topics and subjects.

Most importantly, when teachers have FEWER studentS to take care of, they will also have more time to concern THEMSELVES with the students' both educational and mental deFICIECIES.

In conclusion, to put restrictions on the number of students in a single classroom, gives students more opportunity to prepare themselves for both employment and social life. Also it helps teachers offer more attention to their students and give them more either educationally and mentally.


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[vuralorion]

Thanks Alan, I think I have less mistakes compared to previous essay