TOEFL essay topic: How can schools have new students with their problem?

[Alex Anna]

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Topic 183 – When students move to a new schoo, they sometimes face problems. How can schools help these students with their problem? Use reason and examples to explain your answer.

A new school, with most of students, is an exciting place because they will have more chances to make many new friends and discovering everything in a totally new environment. However, a new school also becomes a big problem with some of students. They have to be familiar with a different background and create all their relationships from the beginning. Therefore, schools should encourage new students to encounter with all these problems with some activities such as an academic training course or welcoming seminar and a friendly environment.

First, schools should have the introductory meetings or seminars for all new students. In a new school, students have to deal with the different academic stuffs, so it makes them a bit of nervous and also really difficult for them to find everything by themselves. Therefore, it will be really helpful if they can join an welcoming serminar at the beginning of the year or course. These serminars don't take long, only in two or three hours but will provide students with all the things relates to the academic systems of the schools. For example, how to register to a course?, how to enroll or drop a class? Or what is the condition to take the final exam? All this information will help students a lot to plan their semester or course schedules.

Second, schools should purposely make a friendly environment for all learners, especially the freshmen. Maps or instruction to all the locations of schools will help the new students a lot. It will be easier for them to find the way to lecture halls, library, lab rooms,.. and they will be soon familiar with new surroundings. Furthermore, campus is the place that students will spend most of their time. So a comfortable dorm will make them feel good as their home. Also, the schools can arrange some clubs’activities such as foot ball club, chess club, dancing club,..Freshmen will be welcomed to be members and these are the chances for them to make companions and enjoy their new lives

In a nutshell, there are many things a school can do to help their new student, such as planning an academic training courses or introductory meeting, establishing a friendly environment in college and campus. This will be really useful for the new student deal with their problems. Furthermore, it is also attracted to more and more students enroll to that school.
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