TOEFL® Essay: Saving land for endangered animals

[Forastero]

Some people think that human needs for farmland, housing, and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals. Do you agree or disagree with this point of view? Why or why not? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
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I can’t understand the people that consider it’s more important supply their needs than saving land. Definitely I’m disagreeing with this point of view.

At the moment, we have the dilemma when it’s obvious that population grows more and more and the new human beings need, naturally, food, land for their houses and industry products, but need also clean water to drink and clean air to breath. If the population continues growing, a lot of forests areas must be disappear to plant food and building houses. These forests areas are responsible to clean the air and spring water. Perhaps they have food for some years, but when the water is gone, how can they have agriculture of animal breeding?

The question asks for “saving land for endangered animals”. I agree with all the efforts that people make to saving portions of land. We are saving endangered animals, but actually we are saving ourselves, our children and the future generations. It’s very important make all the possible efforts to this. There will be good ideas from the government, from the universities, from our own homes and our own life. It must agree with them.

One of the most important decisions that our governors have to take is propose a regulation to Land’s use. Unfortunately, our governors have their own interests in these laws, and can allow facts that are against the conservative needs that we have. If a governor was elected with the Builder’s help, he don’t promulgate a law against a conservative use of Land. We must, as citizens, be very organized to demand that.

I think the main problem to get unanimity face this problem is the non-determinant results of the researches and the political interests of the conservative movements. When you are at home, you have electricity and water, and don’t think that they are disappearing, so don’t trust in the Conservative groups’ alarms and recommendations. But there are millions of people without potable water, without fresh air, they have poor life conditions, but they don’t know the reasons (they can’t access to education). You have the education; you can make your part. We must change this depredation.

Save the land not only for endangered animals, save it to the whole mankind.

TOEFL listening lectures: Which country was not an important cotton grower in the 19th century?

[Forastero]

I hope you can help me :D

The last word (Mankind) is correct? it's better than "humanity"?

Thanks a lot

[Konstantin]

Hello Forastero!
Good job, especially superior vocabulary. I actually don't know a lot about all this English language, nevertheless, I think it would be better to spend more time, considering problems with animals. And in the third paragraph I would accumulate your excellent ideas about tensions with governors.
PS:I would appreciate critics from your side.

[Forastero]

Thanks a lot Konstantin. I'm sure, my problem isn't to write ununderstable, but to write with some syntax mistakes.