TOEFL essay: Having a stable job

[Anne Marie]

Having a stable job is almost people's dream. Each of them has their own reason for choosing their job. As my personality experiences, well-payment, being suitable with my major and relating to travel are reason for my choosing job.

Perhaps, the most important criteria is that my job is relating to my major. I believe that nobody want to work on job that they do not have qualification. With my knowledge about marketing, I wish to work for marketing department in a big company. With this position, I can make use of my knowledge best and help the company's production become widespread.

Another reason that i pay attention to is salary level.I want to be hired at high salary level. With this salary level, i can share my parent's financial burden. I have two younger sister who have been studying at university, therefore, if i have good job i can support money for them, and my parent will not pay much for their tuition. Besides, I can take my family to some our favorite places, which my family cannot because of financial condition.

I like traveling, therefore , it is wonderful if i have to go to many places because of my work. I will know more much different places and culture there. My social knowledge is broaden.

Working in marketing position, and traveling to make advertising for my company help me make my favorite job become real.

My name is Anne

my writing about the topic:
Describe your reason for choosing a job that you has had or would like to have.

I now learn about how to write essay.I hope you will check my ideas and mistakes and organization.
Thank you very much

I wonder what another way to send my writing without join in this section.I mean How can i send them by emai? and you can check it for me?

Anne Marie

[Linda]

Hi Anne,
Please send it to my private messages.
Thanks,
Linda
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[Linda]

Hi Anne Marie,
You can also send me your email address and I'll send the corrections back to you.
Take care,
Linda
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[saoz]

Hi Linda!

One question: how many points would you give for this essay?

[Linda]

Hi Anne Marie,
I made the corrections on your essay but I would like to email the corrections to you - for your privacy.
Hi Saoz,
The grade depends on whether the class is intermediate or advance writing. Anne Marie developed her ideas well but needs to work on some organization and grammar skills.
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