TOEFL essay: Parents are the best teachers

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Do you agree or not with the following statement?
Parents are the best teachers
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

The following is mine . Please give me some advise if you have free time . Thank you very much

From my point of view , my parents are the best teachers in my life . There are three reasons convince me that the best teacher who take care of me , educate me very much are my mum and dad.

First of all, when I was born, my parents taught me all of the most simple things such as: eating, drinking, moving, speaking to recognize relatives in the family and noticing everything around the house. These are essential basis to start a new life and also make very importain role to affect the development of constitution later.

Secondly , when I was sent to kindergarten and school , although I was taught natural and social sciences , art , music … but my parents usually admonished me so much . They gave advises to protect my health , study well and integrate with everyone . They are excellence teacher who communicate a lot of useful and valuable knowledge to me

And lastly even when I came of age and attend university , they still instructed me the way to go through trouble , taught me a way of human behavior . They always give me powers and faith in brighter future

In short , despite things went wrongs sometimes but in my heart and soul , my parents are the best teacher forever.[/i]