TOEFL essay: There are many reasions to work, including the need for money

[Nuong]

There are many reasions to work ,including the need for money .Describe your reasons for choosing a job that you have had or would like to have .Use specific examples and detail to support your answer

Why do you work ? People work for many different reasons such as money ,family's condition ....In my opinion ,there are three main resasons for my choosing job such as hobby ,earning money and geting experience.

I like to work as a teacher ,so I decide attend pedagogic department .I really like to see simply_ minded children and teach them about good things in our life .I will very happy if my students become useful people in the future.Becoming a teacher is my dream since I were young child.

Another reason for my choosing is that I want to earn money to help my parent .With a good teacher ,earning money is not so hard.I believe in my ability ,so I think I will be scholarly teacher .Besides the teaching in my school ,I can teach at home and another school.I belive that there would be many student want to study with me.

Final main reason for my choosing is getting experience .Through my teaching process ,I can gain many experience and knownledge .I can understand chidlren'psychology more clearly.So I can take care my children better .
In conclusion ,I want to become a teacher because of reasons above .If you plan to choose in the future ,I suggest that you you should think carefully

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Nuong

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