A few lines about a shepherd.

[Tom]

Hi

Could you please see if the following few lines sound OK to you? Any suggestions are welcome.

[Yankee]

Hi Tom

Your description of what a shepherd does seems awkward to me, and I'm at a bit of a loss as to how best to improve it.

How about this:

A shepherd moves animals such as goats and sheep into fields or mountains, grazes them, and guides them back at sunset.
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Amy
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[Alan]

Hi Tom,

A few suggestions:

A shepherd gathers together his domestic animals, goats, sheep and the like/and so on in the morning from his area/compound, guides them into the fields or mountains, lets them graze and then returns them to their (respective?) owners by sunset.

Alan
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[Tom]

Many thanks, Amy and Alan

@ Alan

Could you please tell me if the use of respective is wrong here?

Tom

[Alan]

Hi Tom,

'Respective' would work here but it's usually used with reference to nouns mentioned before. Perhaps 'separate' individual' might do as well. But no, on reflection, I'm overnitpicking. 'respective' is just fine.

Alan
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