TOEFL® essay: Many people believe that television programes are of no value...

[Kashpk92]

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Many people believe that television programes are of no value for children.Do you agree? Why or why not? Provide reasons and examples to support your response.
(300 words)
I don't agree, TV programes are of no value for children. I find some of programes quite educational and entertianing for them after studying too long hours.
During this modern age, Children need to refresh their mind by getting entertainment and educational via good TV programes.
Not all programes at TV are responsible for bad attitudes in children. There are also many other really interesting programes that are highly valuable in respect of children's motivation and inspiration. the cartoon programes like donald duck, pink panther, simpson with some moral messages and great fun and also some educational and sports programes are of higher value for new generation. They have been quite useful to improve moral values and to create motivations to full their objectives in future more lively.
It has been proved by scientists that learning process in the childhood age is at its maximum then it decreases with age. children never feel boring when they are watching TV, it is really great source of fun and entertainment after having long day of studying and doing home work. Also creative programes increase their interest and curiosity to know more about nature as being done by Discovery Channel. They learn more from TV programes after studying their books. They kept themselves more concious about world affairs by watching world news about politics, sports and other educational activities in different countries especially news from modern world. They became aware of latest ways of learing, new inventions and technology around the world. They learn new scientific methods and become more ancious in scientific research.
In conclusion, the TV programes are source of entertainment, learning and education for children. After being benefitted from this source of information of changing world, they will be much better citizens of future. After employing all sources of education including TV programs they can become good scientists, doctors, engineers, lawers and officers of future.

Kash

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[Da Designer]

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