TOEFL® essay: People attend college or university for many different reasons

[Nirodha]

People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

When we think about students of a college or university we can see variety of students. They may have different ages, may be from different countries and they may have different goals. When we take an undergraduate class we can see students from age 18 to age 50 or even 55. This impresses that definitely students have different reasons for attending college or university.

One of the main reasons for attending to a college or university is to get a professional job. Since the competition of getting a job is higher and number of job applicants are getting increased every on e should have to be well educated in order to get a good professional job. For example I can explain about myself. During my childhood I wanted to get a good job which can earn higher salaries. So I studied well and finally I passed out from the university as a graduate in computer science. Then I started my career as a software engineer in a well reputed company with a very good salary. Similarly we can find so many reasons for that.

On the other hand some people attend college or university for getting the exposure of some other professors and students. Some people may attend for university because they need to spend their time for some important thing and they need to increase their knowledge. So even though they have money they attend college or university.

In conclusion, I can state that people attend college or university for many different reasons and not for a same goal.

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[Coco]

Hi, I'm coco from Japan, but currently in OZ.
I'll take TOEFL in less than 1 month.
It's really hard to output....
Please check and correct this poor essay if you please.

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People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge).
Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specificreasons and examples to support your answer.

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In general, almost Japanese want to attend college or university recently. Some may have decent reasons, such as getting knowledge of their specific subjects.However, in fact,there are many students who don’t know their reason drastically. In this essay, I would like to say the reason why people attend college or university is for their new experiences on everything.

From my personal view, especially freshmen or the high school students who will take the entrance exams have their purposes and reasons. Everything in college or university is all new and fresh to them, and it will encourage them to do something new. They are surrounded by the new buildings, new friends, new classes, new subjects and new clubs.
On the other hand, as time goes by, the freshness is decreasing as everyone knows. The more they adapted to their new life, the less their curiosity is declining.Actually, some students wasted their time in university with ordinary thing. But, I think there will be more undeciphered experienced there, and just they can’t notice them. If you want more experiences, you can get them by yourself. For example, I saw some elderly people attending the classes eagerly in my university. That’s the why they want new experiences that they couldn’t get in their longer life than students. They taught me that the most important things in life are to know and to touch new things.

All in all, let me say about the main reason to attend college or university. They offer a lot of opportunities and time. In the middle of the campus life, you might lose your aims or way of life. But, you should remember that the new experiences won’t encounter by themselves and you are allowed to generate the situation that you can get them anytime if you want.

[S.sonali]

People attend college or university for many different reasons(for example,new experience,career preparation,increased knowledge).
Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Knowledge is the power of humanbeing. The place where we gain it are not less than holy place that is college or university.
College or university plays a vital role in our life.Some people prefer to attend college or university rather than to take distance learning
because it makes a difference as a stage show and a backstage show.By attending college or university we ameliorate our life.In college
or university we get profound knowledge of multifarious subjects while preparing for a career through new experiences.
After schooling we become enough mature to decide our goals in life.One of the goal is to make career.So, to succeed with
bright career we need somebody who help us to find out the path.It is nothing but college or university where we start first step of career.
While studying for graduation course we interact face to face with teachers and classmates which help
us not only in academic but also in extra curriculum activities.Listening gives good impacts on mind than just reading.Attending classes help
us to quick grasp and understand the subject comparitavely of just work through the notes.If we have any doubts we can directly ask to
teacher and easily clarify it.We can take a chance to study in a group with friends.In group study we slove out each others doubts and
share techniques of problem solving.We will be confident in discussing our thoughts.Thus it increase our knowledge and hone the ideas.
Apart from career goals of an individual it serves to enhance overall personality by arranging and participating in extra curriculum
activities like seminars,sports,exibition,different competetions.It developes spirit to actively work in a group and become a leader .
Thus it gives confidence to face the varied challenges bravely and boldly.
Learning atmosphere of college helps to be in a flow of study.This gives better result.we can easily get notes from teacher and
liabrary .These notes can exchange among friends.
During job recruitments,many companies approach to college.It will be a great apportunity to appear in campus selection and
to interact with companey management.If a candidate has required qualities of a job.Companey will select him/ her. He /she don't need to
go for job hunting a job outside of college.
So, attending college or university has a strong infunce on our life . we experience such experiences which help us to improve
our knowledge,personality.Hence, we can face the world with more confident and build a bright career.

[Kitosdad]

Dear Friend, your essay is very difficult to edit. If you were to edit it yourself and make more sense of some of the more jumbled paragraphs, then I would be happy to help you out by re-editing.

Kitos.
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