TOEFL® essay: It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in...

[Superman]

Nowadays, more and more people move to big cities all over the world. In fact, there are many advantages for adults as well as children to live in a big city. Therefore, I disagree with the statement: “It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city.”

First of all, children who grow up in a big city can have a better education. There are a wide range of schools for them to choose. Also, most of prestigious schools locate at big cities, especially in developed countries. Actually, many children have to go to a big city for their study and it is also a problem for them to live far from home.

Furthermore, it is much more convenient for children in everyday life when growing up in the big city. Because there are many things children find hard or impossible to do in the countryside such as going for doctor, shopping, going for concert or movie as well as special events. On the contrary, they have to go for a long way to do those things and it is waste a lot of time and money.

In addition, living in a big city gives more opportunities for children to widen their mind in many aspects. They can see many things that they might not see in the countryside. For example, the development of technology and telecommunication usually takes place in urban area everyday and it makes the world’s view of the human race change continually. If children are familiar with those things, they can harmonize in the global development. Also, since most of famous people and organizations concentrate on big cities, children can meet and have change to benefit themselves. In some cases, they can get scholarships or awards from those people and organizations.

To sum up, I think it is better for children to grow up in a big city than in the countryside although there are several of disadvantages such as pollution, bad influences. However, the place which is as wonderful as a paradise does not exist in the real world. The important thing is that we should consider children ‘feelings and emotions to know what they really want.

can anyone check and correct for me? Thanks a lot!!!

[Alan]

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Posted: Mon Dec 17, 2007 5:47 pm Post subject: TOEFL essay: It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in...

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Nowadays, more and more people move to big cities all over the world. In fact, there are many advantages for adults as well as children to live in a big city. Therefore, I disagree with the statement: “It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city.”

First of all, children who grow up in a big city can have a better education. There are a wide range of schools for them to choose. Also, most of prestigious schools locate at (ARE LOCATED IN)big cities, especially in developed countries. Actually, many children have to go to a big city for their study and it is also a problem for them to live far from home.

Furthermore, it is much more convenient for children in everyday life when growing up in the big city. because there are many things children find hard or impossible to do in the countryside such as going TO A doctor, shopping, going TO A concert or movie as well as special events. On the contrary, they have to go a long way to do those things and it is A waste a lot of time and money.

In addition, living in a big city gives more opportunities for children to widen their mind in many aspects. They can see many things that they might not see in the countryside. For example, the development of technology and telecommunication usually takes place in urban areaS every day and it makes the world’s view of the human race change continually. If children are familiar with those things, they can harmonize WITH the global development. Also, since most famous people and organizations concentrate on big cities, children can meet and have A CHANCE to benefit. In some cases, they can get scholarships or awards from those people and organizations.

To sum up, I think it is better for children to grow up in a big city than in the countryside although there are several disadvantages such as pollution, bad influences. However, the place which is as wonderful as paradise does not exist in the real world. The important thing is that we should consider childrenS' feelings and emotions to know what they really want.

can anyone check and correct for me? Thanks a lot!!!

This is a good piece of writing. If you check this with what you have written, you will see I have removed some words.

Alan
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